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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree? v.10

Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. v. 10
The reduction of crimes commitment requires the inclusion of strict punishment in law in order to discourage people. Some people believe that outlaws should not be just kept in jails, but should be used to do free cost community works. I completely agree with the statement because I believe that this will further decrease the rate of crimes in the society. The rapid increase recorded in the number of offensive actions is largely due to the loopholes in law in vogue. Those who break it believe that they will easily get bail because of non-availability of strict torture as well as the cumbersome process in courts to quickly get the outcome of the case. That’s why they bear no problem being kept in bars. For example the report published on the massive increase in the number of crimes revealed from the random survey, that such persons are just caught and kept in jails without any difficult work to do to make them discourage in the coming time. Thus, this becomes the major reason for going against rather than following it. In addition, when provisions exist in the law that jailers will be also subject punishment upon caught, thus nobody will ever think of breaking the law and hence the rate will then decline. For instance, the stringent laws that are formulated in the advanced countries of the globe, include certain provisions for the prisoners that they will be subject to minor punishment like a free cost work for the society, has largely encouraged people to adhere and follow the law. In conclusion, unless efforts are made to make the lives of prisoners difficult and hard, the rate of crimes will only escalate. While residents should always adhere to the rules and policies in vogue, governments should make efforts to remove any ambiguity from the legislation in order to not provide a way for people to commit crimes.
The reduction of
crimes
commitment requires the inclusion of strict punishment in
law
in order to discourage
people
.
Some
people
believe that outlaws should not be
just
kept
in jails,
but
should be
used
to do free cost community works. I completely
agree
with the statement
because
I believe that this will
further
decrease the rate of
crimes
in the society.

The rapid increase recorded in the number of offensive actions is
largely
due to the loopholes in
law
in vogue. Those who break it believe that they will
easily
get
bail
because
of non-availability of strict torture
as well
as the cumbersome process in courts to
quickly
get
the outcome of the case. That’s why they bear no problem being
kept
in bars.
For example
the report published on the massive increase in the number of
crimes
revealed from the random survey, that such persons are
just
caught and
kept
in jails without any difficult work to do to
make
them discourage in the coming time.
Thus
, this becomes the major reason for going against
rather
than following it.

In addition
, when provisions exist in the
law
that jailers will be
also
subject punishment upon caught,
thus
nobody will ever
think
of breaking the
law
and
hence
the rate will then decline.
For instance
, the stringent
laws
that
are formulated
in the advanced countries of the globe, include certain provisions for the prisoners that they will be subject to minor punishment like a free cost work for the society, has
largely
encouraged
people
to adhere and follow the law.

In conclusion
, unless efforts
are made
to
make
the
lives
of prisoners difficult and
hard
, the rate of
crimes
will
only
escalate. While residents should always adhere to the
rules
and policies in vogue,
governments
should
make
efforts to remove any ambiguity from the legislation in order to not provide a way for
people
to commit
crimes
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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