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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. v.4

Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. v. 4
Every country wants to reduce its dependency on importing while wishes to maximise its export items and the food is not an exception to that. However, not all countries have the same geographic features, weather condition and suitable lands to produce each type of food the citizens need. This is why a country should focus more on its overall economic growth rather than using manpower and budget to become self-reliant on food, despite some people's opposing views. To begin with, soil, weather condition, available lands and demographics of a county determines what crops and fruits it can produce. Not all countries have the same geographical feature and manpower and thus it is evitable that some of the items require importing. In many cases, importing is rather advantageous than producing it. For instance, it is impossible for an Arab country to produce all types of foods due to its weather condition. If they focus on growing these food items and engage its manpower to do that, their economic growth would get slower. Moreover, a country like Germany and China can focus on manufacturing and industrial innovation while import food from other countries. The ultimate outcome is more beneficial for them. However, this might not be the case for a country that solely depends on the agriculture sector and majority of its population are already dependant on it. They can focus on improving its production but this model is not suitable for industrial countries. To conclude, I personally believe that the free trade and globalisation have made the world a global village and with the speedy transportation system, food import cost has already declined. Since fulfilling the mass people's diverse needs for various kinds of food is not feasible for a country, it should focus on its true potential rather than allocating budget and manpower to become self-dependent on food.
Every
country
wants to
reduce
its dependency on importing while wishes to
maximise
its export items and the
food
is not an exception to that.
However
, not all
countries
have the same geographic features, weather condition and suitable lands to produce each type of
food
the citizens need. This is why a
country
should
focus
more on its
overall
economic growth
rather
than using manpower and budget to become self-reliant on
food
, despite
some
people
's opposing views.

To
begin
with, soil, weather condition, available lands and demographics of a county determines what crops and fruits it can produce. Not all
countries
have the same geographical feature and manpower and
thus
it is
evitable
that
some of the
items require importing. In
many
cases, importing is
rather
advantageous than producing it.
For instance
, it is impossible for an Arab
country
to produce all types of
foods
due to its weather condition. If they
focus
on growing these
food
items and engage its manpower to do that, their economic growth would
get
slower.

Moreover
, a
country
like Germany and China can
focus
on manufacturing and industrial innovation while import
food
from other
countries
. The ultimate outcome is more beneficial for them.
However
, this might not be the case for a
country
that
solely
depends on the agriculture sector and
majority of
its population are already
dependant
on it. They can
focus
on improving its production
but
this model is not suitable for industrial countries.

To conclude
, I
personally
believe that the free trade and
globalisation
have made the world a global village and with the speedy transportation system,
food
import cost has already declined. Since fulfilling the mass
people
's diverse needs for various kinds of
food
is not feasible for a
country
, it should
focus
on its true potential
rather
than allocating budget and manpower to become self-dependent on
food
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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