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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v.32

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 32
Governments, all around the world, have visions to fulfil and responsibilities to carry on, and they seek to achieve the overall developments of their countries for a prosperous future. Thus many governments think that economic progress is the key to success while others disagree with this notion and opine that many other aspects such as green environment, security, social values, traditions and peace among nations are more important. I personally believe that the economic success of a nation is an important goal for a government but this is not the most important one. To begin with, many developed countries have already gained economic progress and yet they are suffering from growing crime rates, hostile relationship with other nations, corruptions and outbreak of epidemic diseases. Thus economic progress has failed to ensure a better life standard of citizens and this is a proof that only economic progress should not be the vision of a government. On the contrary, without economic stability, a government cannot ensure advancement in education, defence, healthcare, international trade and social safety. Again, industrialisation and success in trades have ensured economic stability to many western and Asian countries and yet the environmental damage that has caused is overwhelming. What good money would bring to a nation if they cannot build a safe and green environment for the next generation? However, many people would also argue that it is better to bestow a prosperous country to the new generation rather than leaving them a broken economy. Furthermore, economic progress requires industrialisations, dominance in international trade and the use of cheap labours from other countries. History tells us that wars are imminent due to irrational competition among nations. On the contrary, without economic success, a country cannot defend itself from external threats, fight with epidemic diseases and cannot ensure proper health care facilities to its citizens. Finally, some would say, with the economic progress the country will lose its old way of living, traditional values and uniqueness as a nation. But it should also be considered that change is the fundamental basis of development and if a nation worries too much about the old ways of living, it would fail to ensure progress at a steady pace. In conclusion, there is no doubt that economic progress should be an important goal for a government but there are still many aspects which are equally important.
Governments
, all around the world, have visions to fulfil and responsibilities to carry on, and they seek to achieve the
overall
developments of their
countries
for a prosperous future.
Thus
many
governments
think
that
economic
progress
is the key to
success
while others disagree with this notion and opine that
many
other
aspects such as green environment, security, social values, traditions and peace among
nations
are more
important
. I
personally
believe that the
economic
success
of a
nation
is an
important
goal for a
government
but
this is not the most
important
one.

To
begin
with,
many
developed
countries
have already gained
economic
progress and
yet
they are suffering from growing crime rates, hostile relationship with
other
nations
, corruptions and outbreak of epidemic diseases.
Thus
economic
progress
has failed to
ensure
a better life standard of citizens and this is a proof that
only
economic
progress
should not be the vision of a
government
.
On the contrary
, without
economic
stability, a
government
cannot
ensure
advancement in education,
defence
, healthcare, international trade and social safety.

Again,
industrialisation
and
success
in trades have ensured
economic
stability to
many
western and Asian
countries
and
yet
the environmental damage that has caused is overwhelming. What
good
money would bring to a
nation
if they cannot build a safe and green environment for the
next
generation?
However
,
many
people
would
also
argue that it is better to bestow a prosperous
country
to the new generation
rather
than leaving them a broken economy.

Furthermore
,
economic
progress
requires
industrialisations
, dominance in international trade and the
use
of
cheap
labours
from
other
countries
. History
tells
us that wars are imminent due to irrational competition among
nations
.
On the contrary
, without
economic
success
, a
country
cannot defend itself from external threats, fight with epidemic diseases and cannot
ensure
proper health care facilities to its citizens.
Finally
,
some
would say, with the
economic
progress
the
country
will lose its
old
way of living, traditional values and uniqueness as a
nation
.
But
it should
also
be considered
that
change
is the fundamental basis of development and if a
nation
worries too much about the
old
ways of living, it would fail to
ensure
progress
at a steady pace.

In conclusion
, there is no doubt that
economic
progress
should be an
important
goal for a
government
but
there are
still
many
aspects which are
equally
important
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 32

Essay
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