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Tpo-6: independent task: Do you agree or disagree? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v.2

Tpo-6: independent task: Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v. 2
It has been taken for granted that nowadays preparing more convenient life facilities and comfortably is one of the most important aims for many people. Many argue that life in before for example 50 years ago was not as easy as it is today. In this essay I am going to argue why I agree that today’s living is much more easier than before. Rapid changes in the last few decades had many advantages and disadvantages affects on people’s life and in my opinion in many areas it has lead peoples lives easier in many ways. Changes in technology has the greatest affect and in made many works that had been done by hand and muscle force by the time of our grandparents much easier with its huge findings and inventions as in electricity and mechanical machines like washing machines, dishwashers and even in supplying peoples vital needs like water and food in modern ways. People traveling and freight transportations in the past was usually only by walking or riding animals and took much efforts and time. But today with all of the transportation ways like cars, trains, airplanes and etc people can move faster, easier and safer. Communication changes today had also an extraordinary change in people’s life in compare of our grandparents childhood that even hadn’t had the access to telephones. But now we have access to mobile phones and are able to make video calls and chat online and have the access to all kind of information with the use of internet. So many life facilities have been improved since before and many of them made living easier. Because of all the reasons I indicated above I agree that life today is much easier as the time of our grandparents childhood.
It has
been taken
for granted that nowadays preparing more convenient
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life
facilities and
comfortably
is one of the most
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important
aims for
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many
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people
.
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Many
argue that
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life
in
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before
for example
50 years ago was not as easy as it is
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today
. In this essay I am going to argue why I
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agree
that
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today’s
living is
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much
more
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easier
than
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before
.

Rapid
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changes
in the last few decades had
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many
advantages and disadvantages affects on
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people’s
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life
and in my opinion in
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many
areas it has lead
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peoples
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lives
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easier
in
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many
ways.
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Changes
in technology has the greatest affect and in made
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many
works that had
been done
by hand and muscle force by the time of our grandparents
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much
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easier
with its huge findings and inventions as in electricity and mechanical machines like washing machines, dishwashers and even in supplying
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peoples
vital needs like water and food in modern ways.

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People
traveling and freight transportations in the past was
usually
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only
by walking or riding animals and took
Use "many" with countable nouns.
much
efforts and time.
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But
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today
with
Consider using "all the".
all of the
transportation ways like cars, trains, airplanes
Write the name of the item after 'and' or use only "etc".
and etc
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people
can
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move
faster,
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easier
and safer.

Communication
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changes
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today
had
also
an extraordinary
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change
in
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people’s
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life
in compare of our grandparents childhood that even hadn’t had the access to telephones.
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But
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now
we have access to mobile phones and are able to
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make
video calls and chat online and have the access to all kind of information with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of internet.

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So
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many
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life
facilities have been
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improved
since
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before
and
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many
of them made living
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easier
.
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Because
of all the reasons I indicated above I
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agree
that
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life
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today
is
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much
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easier
as the time of our grandparents childhood.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Tpo-6: independent task: Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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