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Some people say the cars should be banned from the centers of cities. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say the cars should be banned from the centers of cities. v. 1
In this modern day that technology is quite advancing, some people say that cars should be banned from the heart of the cities. While removing cars from the city might do some positive effects, I personally believed that it will have some disadvantages, too. At present, as the technology continues to advance, the use of cars seemed to be more of basic necessity among individuals. Cars help ease the hassle of going from one place to another. Majority of the population in the Philippines owns power operated cars that give them the comfort of going from one place to another in just a short amount of time, and less hassle. I, for instance, am a fan of transportations, that I use it more whenever I go to my destination rather than by foot. Doing so is much more convenient and eases up the effort of walking long distances. I mean, who would want to use effort in walking, when a car is readily available and would take you to places in just a couple of minutes, right? Thus, the convenience the car offers makes it beneficial at some point. However, there may be some drawbacks with the utilization of engine-powered transports especially in big cities. Using autos more often contribute to the overall index of air pollution as it releases some smoke that contributes to the nitrogen and other harmful and toxic pollutants in the air that we, individuals breathe. As a matter of fact, large urban areas in the Philippines, such as Manila are reported to have more noted cases of lung diseases due to the pollution that is being taken through air. Hence, justifies the removal of cars in the metro areas. In a nutshell, banning of cars in huge towns presents a good and bad effect, in general. Beneficial, in way that cars make the lives of everyone easier, while disadvantageous, in a manner that it might cause some health concerns among the public.
In this modern day that technology is quite advancing,
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some
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people
say that
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cars
should
be banned
from the heart of the cities. While removing
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cars
from the city might do
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some
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positive
effects, I
personally
believed that it will have
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some
disadvantages, too.

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use
of
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cars
seemed to be more of basic necessity among individuals.
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Cars
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help
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ease
the hassle of going from one place to another. Majority of the population in the Philippines
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owns
power operated
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cars
that give them the comfort of going from one place to another in
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just
a short amount of time, and less hassle. I,
for instance
, am a fan of transportations, that I
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use
it more whenever I go to my destination
rather
than by foot. Doing
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so
is much more convenient and
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eases
up the effort of walking long distances. I mean, who would want to
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use
effort in walking, when a
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car
is
readily
available and would take you to places in
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just
a couple of minutes, right?
Thus
, the convenience the
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car
offers
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makes
it beneficial at
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some
point.

However
, there may be
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some
drawbacks with the utilization of engine-powered transports
especially
in
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big
cities. Using autos more
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often
contribute to the
overall
index of air pollution as it releases
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some
smoke that contributes to the nitrogen and other harmful and toxic pollutants in the air that we, individuals breathe. As a matter of fact, large urban areas in the Philippines, such as Manila
are reported
to have more noted cases of lung diseases due to the pollution
that is
being taken
through air.
Hence
, justifies the removal of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in the metro areas.

In a nutshell, banning of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in huge towns presents a
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good
and
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bad
effect,
in general
. Beneficial, in way that
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cars
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make
the
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lives
of everyone easier, while disadvantageous, in a manner that it might cause
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some
health concerns among the public.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say the cars should be banned from the centers of cities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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