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In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.5

In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 5
Age is the matter of mind, if you do not mind it doesn't matter, so aging would never become a hindrance in the completion of successful job nevertheless it is a physical one. I agree to consider this as an illegal act, infact i believe it to be a positive development as only it not gives a chance to more people to showcase their talent but also provide an opportunity to grow in different fields of life irrespective of their age. This essay will explore how these important factors will potentiate my stance. As a matter of fact, most people are not aware of their real talent in an early age. They come to know about their potentials after exposure to certain factors like better educational facilities and enriched environment. If they are not allowed to do jobs at a later stage in life, just because of their age, that would be a great injustice or a cruelty in fact. For example, CEO of Apple Company was fifty years of age when hired, and he is doing wonders for his company. Moreover, if there was an age barrier, he wouldn't be able to get this job. Thus, it is self explanatory not to consider age as a hindrance in a way of success. It is a truth universally acknowledged that age ripens the mind, hence making a person more creative and opens new avenues of opportunities in later life. This action of rejecting a notion of an age limit to be considered an eligible for certain jobs, gives hope among those who don't get opportunities in their earlier life because of their poor economic condition or any other misfortune. For instance, a friend of mine was not able to get job in a reputed institution just because of an exceeding age limit, though he was an ambitious and legit enough for the job. Therefore, it is discouraging for people if they are refrained from job just because of their age. In conclusion, overall it is a positive development to consider age restriction as an illegal act in most of the jobs. This will encourage all kind of people to remain constantly active and take part in country's progress with full zeal and zest. It would give them an ample amount of time to use their potentials.
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is the matter of mind, if you do not mind it doesn't matter,
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so
aging would never become a hindrance in the completion of successful
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job
nevertheless
it is a physical one. I
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agree
to consider this as an illegal act,
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infact
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i
believe it to be a
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positive
development as
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only
it not gives a chance to more
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people
to showcase their talent
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but
also
provide an opportunity to grow in
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different
fields of
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life
irrespective of their
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age
. This essay will explore how these
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important
factors will potentiate my stance.

As a matter of fact, most
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people
are not aware of their real talent in an early
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age
. They
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come
to know about their potentials after exposure to certain factors like better educational facilities and enriched environment. If they are not
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allowed
to do
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jobs
at a later stage in
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life
,
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just
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because
of their
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age
, that would be a great injustice or a cruelty in fact.
For example
, CEO of Apple
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Company
was fifty years of
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age
when hired, and he is doing wonders for his
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company
.
Moreover
, if there was an
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age
barrier, he wouldn't be able to
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get
this
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job
.
Thus
, it is
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self explanatory
not to consider
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age
as a hindrance in a way of success.

It is a truth
universally
acknowledged that
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age
ripens the mind,
hence
making a person more creative and opens new avenues of opportunities in later
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life
. This action of rejecting a notion of an
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age
limit to
be considered
an eligible for certain
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jobs
, gives hope among those who don't
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get
opportunities in their earlier
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life
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because
of their poor economic condition or any other misfortune.
For instance
, a friend of mine was not able to
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get
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job
in a reputed institution
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just
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because
of an exceeding
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age
limit, though he was an ambitious and legit
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enough
for the
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job
.
Therefore
, it is discouraging for
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people
if they
are refrained
from
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job
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just
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because
of their age.

In conclusion
,
overall
it is a
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positive
development to consider
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age
restriction as an illegal act in most of the
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jobs
. This will encourage all kind of
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people
to remain
constantly
active and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in country's progress with full zeal and zest. It would give them an ample amount of time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their potentials.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries it is now illegal to reject someone applying for a job because of his or her age. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
386 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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