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Some people say the best way for the government to solve traffic congestion is to provide public transportation 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people say the best way for the government to solve traffic congestion is to provide public transportation 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. v. 2
There is a common belief that only the free public transportation 24 hours a day and 7 days a week can address traffic jams. Although this proposal may be effective to some degree, I would argue that there are other better ways to alleviate the issue. Naturally, theoretically, free public transportation all the time could solve the traffic congestion. This is because this act can encourage the citizens to take public vehicles, such as buses or subways, rather than to drive private cars and there will be fewer cars on the road. When the public transportation become more frequently and intensive, it could replace the function of the private cars in daily life, so that there is no need for the citizens to drive their own cars in the rush hour. However, in fact, the free policy may not be that effective in solving traffic congestion. Since the buses are not convenient and the residents have to take a long time to the bus stations or stops, they may still choose to drive their own cars when they go out. To resolve the traffic problem, the government should improve the public transportation. For example, it can build more bus lines and stations, which can allow passengers to access easily and give up driving on their own. In addition, the government should increase the price of the petrol. Under the circumstance of higher cost of driving and the convenience of the public transportation, the local people may be more likely to choose not to drive their cars. All in all, in order to combat traffic jams, the government should not carry out just one policy—free public transportation, and it ought to ameliorate the public transit system and exert financial burden on the drivers who drive to work or shop.
There is a common belief that
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the free
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public
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transportation
24 hours a day and 7 days a week can address
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traffic
jams. Although this proposal may be effective to
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some
degree, I would argue that there are other better ways to alleviate the issue.

Naturally
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theoretically
, free
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public
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transportation
all the time could solve the
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traffic
congestion. This is
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because
this act can encourage the citizens to take
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public
vehicles, such as buses or subways,
rather
than to
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drive
private
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cars
and there will be fewer
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cars
on the road. When the
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public
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transportation
become more
frequently
and intensive, it could replace the function of the private
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cars
in daily life,
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so
that there is no need for the citizens to
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drive
their
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own
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cars
in the rush hour.
However
, in fact, the free policy may not be that effective in solving
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traffic
congestion. Since the buses are not convenient and the residents
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have to
take a long time to the bus stations or
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stops
, they may
still
choose to
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drive
their
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cars
when they go out.

To resolve the
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traffic
problem, the
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government
should
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improve
the
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public
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transportation
.
For example
, it can build more bus lines and stations, which can
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allow
passengers to access
easily
and give up driving on their
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own
.
In addition
, the
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government
should increase the price of the petrol. Under the circumstance of higher cost of driving and the convenience of the
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public
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transportation
, the local
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people
may be more likely to choose not to
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drive
their cars.

All in all, in order to combat
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traffic
jams, the
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government
should not carry out
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just
one policy—free
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public
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transportation
, and it ought to ameliorate the
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public
transit system and exert financial burden on the drivers who
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drive
to work or shop.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say the best way for the government to solve traffic congestion is to provide public transportation 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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