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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.2

Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. with this opinion? v. 2
With the increasing popularity of new age / electronic media, traditional newspapers seem less appealing and unnecessary to many people. I believe that this trend is inevitable; however, it does not mean that print media has become redundant. As technology has developed at an astounding pace, a considerable number of people have gadgets, such as mobile phones and the computers, which allow them to find information at any time, so fewer people read print newspapers today. If they want to check what is happening around the world, what they need to do is to just press some buttons on their screen. This way of accessing news has many advantages over reading print newspapers in terms of time efficiency and convenience, and that is why most modern people are no longer big fans of print newspapers. Another reason why print newspapers are no longer needed is that their presentation of information is monotonous while the various functions of the digital news are more engaging and personalized. The discussion board of news online provides viewers with opportunities to exchange their ideas about how they perceive the news events; with notifications of digital news, subscribers can be well informed of the most updated information, so they will not miss any important news reports. All these features cannot be found in print newspapers because they just display information with texts and photographs. On the other hand, reading newspapers in a traditional way may be preferred by some people, as print newspapers are more authoritative in terms of the authenticity of information. To publish an issue of newspaper, it involves a series of processes such as journalists collecting information on spot and editors proofreading reports multiple times. These vigorous steps greatly ensure the reliability of news. By contrast, much of online news is not true because each internet user is able to publish news and make it go it go viral. Readers of this kind of fault information will be misled. In conclusion, print newspapers are still needed because of their inherent merits that online media lack. They are a reliable source of news and information. They may lack the versatility of online media but that does not mean that they are not needed.
With the increasing popularity of
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new
age / electronic
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media
, traditional
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newspapers
seem less appealing and unnecessary to
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many
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people
. I believe that this trend is inevitable;
however
, it does not mean that
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print
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media
has become redundant.

As technology has developed at an astounding pace, a considerable number of
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people
have gadgets, such as mobile phones and the computers, which
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allow
them to find
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information
at any time,
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so
fewer
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people
read
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print
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newspapers
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today
. If they want to
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check
what is happening around the world, what they need to do is to
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just
press
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some
buttons on their screen. This way of accessing
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news
has
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many
advantages over reading
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print
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newspapers
in terms of time efficiency and convenience, and
that is
why
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most
modern
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people
are no longer
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big
fans of
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print
newspapers.

Another reason why
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print
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newspapers
are no longer needed is that their presentation of
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information
is monotonous while the various functions of the digital
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news
are more engaging and personalized. The discussion board of
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news
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online
provides viewers with opportunities to exchange their
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ideas
about how they perceive the
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news
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
; with notifications of digital
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news
, subscribers can be
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well informed
of the most updated
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information
,
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so
they will not miss any
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important
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news
reports. All these features cannot
be found
in
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print
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newspapers
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because
they
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just
display
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information
with texts and photographs.

On the other hand
, reading
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newspapers
Consider replacing "in a traditional way" with the adverb for "traditional"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a traditional way
may
be preferred
by
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some
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people
, as
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print
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newspapers
are more authoritative in terms of the authenticity of
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information
. To publish an issue of
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newspaper
, it involves a series of processes such as journalists collecting
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information
on spot and editors proofreading reports multiple times. These vigorous steps
greatly
ensure the reliability of
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news
. By contrast, much of
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online
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news
is not true
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because
each internet user is able to publish
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news
and
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make
This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only "it go".
it go it go
viral. Readers of this kind of fault
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information
will
be misled
.

In conclusion
,
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print
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newspapers
are
still
needed
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because
of their inherent merits that
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online
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media
lack. They are a reliable source of
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news
and
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information
. They may lack the versatility of
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online
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media
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but
that does not mean that they are not needed.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. with this opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
369 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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