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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v.5

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 5
Many countries which hold by tourism have to allow large numbers of visitors and equip facilities as holidaymakers need. Tourism can develop economical field in its countries, but it causes many problems too. In this essay, I would clarify about factual of the negative impact of tourism. In my view, tourism brings some harmful impacts and it puts pressure on local society. Increasing of tourists can make uncomfortable local community if they want to do something in their own areas. Furthermore, there occurs a rise in the cost of living which affects local people. Also, the price of goods, services and housing may increase significantly, which are caused by developing of tourists in tourism. In addition, tourism can also have bad effects on the natural environment. The building of facilities as hotels can damage the natural areas of tourism and destroy wildlife habitats too. Then, the large amount of tourists can rise the amount of pollution and waste in its areas which is caused by developing of traffic and visitors. All of these are really destructive environment in its countries. Commonly, I believe that there is some solution which tourists can do to reduce the worst effects of tourism. If holidaymakers want to go on holiday, they should think where they will go and choose the place which is not overcrowded. Also, they should think how to minimize pollution and rubbish if they want to visit and leave some places on their holiday. To put them in a nutshell, touris gives many benefits to its countries. Whereas, the visitors should pay attention more about the negative effects of tourism on the local community and environment over there.
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have to
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allow
large numbers of visitors and equip facilities as holidaymakers need.
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Tourism
can develop economical field in its countries,
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it causes
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many
problems too. In this essay, I would clarify about factual of the
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impact of tourism.

In my view,
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tourism
brings
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some
harmful impacts and it puts pressure on
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local
society. Increasing of
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tourists
can
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make
uncomfortable
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local
community if they want to do something in their
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own
areas.
Furthermore
, there occurs a rise in the cost of living which affects
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local
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people
.
Also
, the price of
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goods
, services and housing may increase
significantly
, which
are caused
by developing of
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tourists
in tourism.

In addition
,
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tourism
can
also
have
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bad
effects on the natural environment. The building of facilities as hotels can damage the natural areas of
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tourism
and
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destroy
wildlife habitats too. Then, the large amount of
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tourists
can rise the amount of pollution and waste in its areas which
is caused
by developing of traffic and visitors. All of these are
really
destructive environment in its countries.

Commonly
, I believe that there is
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some
solution which
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tourists
can do to
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reduce
the worst effects of
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tourism
. If holidaymakers want to go on holiday, they should
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think
where they will go and choose the place which is not overcrowded.
Also
, they should
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think
how to minimize pollution and rubbish if they want to visit and
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leave
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some
places on their holiday.

To put them in a nutshell,
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touris
gives
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many
benefits to its countries. Whereas, the visitors should pay attention more about the
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negative
effects of
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tourism
on the
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local
community and environment over there.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
277 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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