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Write about the following topics. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience. v.2

s. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 2
In recent years, the expansion of amount of tourism in luxury conurbations has been increasing rapidly day by day. As a result, the issue has become an obstacle which the local executive authorities feel worried about because of the detrimental impacts on local cultures and environments caused by resorting. However, the hindrance is surmountable if tourists can do some precise solutions. Initially, tourism development has led to the accommodation proliferation which has expanded in an unprecedented speed. Consequently, it ruins the environmentally valuable heritage. As shown by a variety of surveys discovered by environmentalists, they approve that the explosion of hotel apparently destroys the natural local landscapes which can maintain the ecological biodiversity balance. Hence, the problem has become a hot spot because the environment is a steady cornerstone for economic development so if the habitats were wrecked by visitors, the national government cannot industrialize the countries. By contrast, tourists can many accurate methods to decrease those negative impacts on the environments and local cultures. For instance, they can support voluntarily the multiculturalism maintenance by propagating the local civilization. Simultaneously, transmitting the local lifestyle is also a stepping stone to help tourists conscious of the environmental problem because when they beheld the magnificence, they would comply subconsciously with the environmental protection legislation and policies promulgated by those executive authorities to protect the charming, precious natural resources. Therefore, the problem in the pipeline can be clarified straightforward when we claim the helpful awareness from visitors. Finally, we cannot negate completely the malevolent impacts of exploration on the countries due to the deficiency of adequate awareness of tourism participants but every issue has its own panacea. According to each individual, we have vastly different ways to reduce the disadvantageous effects of jaunting on local cultures and environments.
In recent years, the expansion of amount of tourism in luxury conurbations has been increasing
rapidly
day by day.
As a result
, the issue has become an obstacle which the
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local
executive authorities feel worried about
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because
of the detrimental impacts on
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local
cultures and
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environments
caused by resorting.
However
, the hindrance is surmountable if tourists can do
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some
precise solutions.

Initially
, tourism development has led to the accommodation proliferation which has expanded in an unprecedented speed.
Consequently
, it ruins the
environmentally
valuable heritage. As shown by a variety of surveys discovered by environmentalists, they approve that the explosion of hotel
apparently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroys
the natural
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local
landscapes which can maintain the ecological biodiversity balance.
Hence
, the problem has become a hot spot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
is a steady cornerstone for economic development
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so
if the habitats
were wrecked
by visitors, the national
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
cannot industrialize the countries.

By contrast, tourists can
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many
accurate methods to decrease those
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negative
impacts on the
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environments
and
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local
cultures.
For instance
, they can support
voluntarily
the multiculturalism maintenance by propagating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
civilization.
Simultaneously
, transmitting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
lifestyle is
also
a stepping stone to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
tourists conscious of the environmental problem
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
when they beheld the magnificence, they would comply
subconsciously
with the environmental protection legislation and policies promulgated by those executive authorities to protect the charming, precious natural resources.
Therefore
, the problem in the pipeline can
be clarified
straightforward when we claim the helpful awareness from visitors.

Finally
, we cannot negate completely the malevolent impacts of exploration on the countries due to the deficiency of adequate awareness of tourism participants
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
every issue has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
panacea. According to each individual, we have
vastly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the disadvantageous effects of jaunting on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
cultures and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environments
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay s. Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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