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"Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments" v.1

"Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments" v. 1
After having a hectic schedule, people tend to get away from it all in the summer by going on a holiday. Therefore, the number of tourists often grow rapidly which has two-sided influences. Government and residents are the one to realize the impact of mass tourism on different nations where visitors have been through. It is true that tourists may affect negatively in some cases but they still have definite advantages. Thanks to the growth of foreign visitors, the level of unemployment goes down, more and more people are now occupied by being a tour guide or an office worker in a tourism service office. Also, it is the base for indigenous residents to exchange the culture from each other which is immensely crucial to the tendency of globalization nowadays. For instance, people likely to learn more languages because they believe that languages will cross the border and get others closer by making events related to those cultures. Both benefits mentioned above are all help promote the development of the national economy due to the tourist attractions mushroom and the similarity, ease when catch something originated in their countries. However, mass tourism can take its toll on the local sites and environment. In order to attract more tourists, pristine areas are now filled with luxury hotels, resorts and tourism service places due to the need for more accommodation. In addition, not only the environment is adversely affected but also local sites either. Overseas travelers may vandalize the heritage by littering, graffitiing and so one which cause the historic buildings severely run-down. As a result, we need to take some methods to halt the level of tourist effects on countries. First, we should put warning signs in front of local sites for bar tourists from touching, coming close or doing harm to statues, historic sites and so on. Second, raising entrance fee for some tourist attractions such as Son Doong Cave, which is now in process of rundown, to limit the number of visitors. The last one, we should bring in new tourism laws to restrict the entrance (visa, ID card, papers, etc. ) and consider rough punishment for those who break the laws. In conclusion, it is important for tourists to handle the negative effects that each of them make. And the way to reduce that problem is tourists have to show good attitude wherever they are.
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people
tend to
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get
away from it all in the summer by going on a holiday.
Therefore
, the number of
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tourists
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often
grow
rapidly
which has two-sided influences.
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Government
and residents are the one to realize the impact of mass
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tourism
on
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different
nations where visitors have been through.

It is true that
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tourists
may affect
negatively
in
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some
cases
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but
they
still
have
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definite
advantages. Thanks to the growth of foreign visitors, the level of unemployment goes down, more and more
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people
are
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now
occupied by being a tour guide or an office worker in a
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tourism
service office.
Also
, it is the base for indigenous residents to exchange the culture from each other which is
immensely
crucial to the tendency of globalization nowadays.
For instance
,
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people
likely to learn more languages
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because
they believe that languages will cross the border and
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get
others closer by making
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events
related to those cultures. Both benefits mentioned above are all
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help
promote the development of the national economy due to the
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tourist
attractions mushroom and the similarity,
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ease
when catch something originated in their countries.
However
, mass
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tourism
can take its toll on the local
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sites
and environment. In order to attract more
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tourists
, pristine areas are
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now
filled with luxury hotels, resorts and
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tourism
service places due to the need for more accommodation.
In addition
, not
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only
the environment is
adversely
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affected
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but
also
local
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sites
either. Overseas travelers may vandalize the heritage by littering, graffitiing and
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so
one which cause the historic buildings
severely
run-down.

As a result
, we need to take
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some
methods to halt the level of
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tourist
effects on countries.
First
, we should put warning signs in front of local
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sites
for bar
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tourists
from touching, coming close or doing harm to statues, historic
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sites
and
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so
on. Second, raising entrance fee for
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some
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tourist
attractions such as Son
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Doong
Cave, which is
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now
in process of rundown, to limit the number of visitors. The last one, we should bring in new
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tourism
laws to restrict the entrance (visa, ID card, papers, etc.
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)
and consider rough punishment for those who break the laws.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
for
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tourists
to handle the
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negative
effects that each of them
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make
. And the way to
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reduce
that problem is
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tourists
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have to
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show
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good
attitude wherever they are.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
Language is the blood of the soul into which thoughts run and out of which they grow.
Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS essay "Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments" v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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