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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v.2

Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 2
Many countries which have beautiful tourism place is not merely obtaining a positive impact from the holidaymaker. They might be gaining many drawbacks such as assimilation of some culture, or the environmental pollution caused by rubbish. I do believe that this argument exceedingly true. To begin with, one of the intangible things is often neglected by several countries which have irresistible place, they tend to consider the positive sides than the negative impacts. Whereas, some people convince, tourism place also has some detrimental effects. The most common phenomenon that we can see around us is tourism places has already become one source to demolish the natural culture in that region. It is because tourist around the world who came in those places have different culture. Also, by the increasing number of travelers in that region, it leads to the bad influence of the environment like the amount of rubbish mount significantly caused by the tourist. Thus, the best way to decrease the negative effect that could be affected for the occupants or the environment, indeed the travel makers should maintain their kind behaviour in every place that they visit like throwing garbage in its proper place. Besides that, those also are suggested before deciding to go to somewhere places, they have to look for the aiming countries in order to make adapted with the society. For instance, some countries might be, do not allow foreign visitors to consume drugs in tourism place. To conclude, I utterly believe that tourism place also has negative effects like broke up the original culture of the local society, and cause the environment pollution. On the other hand, the way to reduce that problem is tourists have to show good attitude wherever they are.
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countries
which have
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beautiful
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tourism
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place
is not
merely
obtaining a
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positive
impact from the holidaymaker. They might be gaining
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many
drawbacks such as assimilation of
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some
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culture
, or the environmental pollution caused by rubbish. I do believe that this argument
exceedingly
true.

To
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begin
with, one of the intangible things is
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often
neglected by several
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countries
which have irresistible
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place
, they tend to consider the
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positive
sides than the
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negative
impacts. Whereas,
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some
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people
convince,
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tourism
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place
also
has
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some
detrimental effects.

The most common phenomenon that we can
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see
around us is
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tourism
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places
has already become one source to demolish the natural
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culture
in that region. It is
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because
tourist around the world who came in those
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places
have
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different
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culture
.
Also
, by the increasing number of travelers in that region, it leads to the
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bad
influence of the environment like the amount of rubbish mount
significantly
caused by the tourist.

Thus
, the best way to decrease the
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negative
effect that could be
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affected
for the occupants or the environment,
indeed
the travel makers should maintain their kind
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behaviour
in every
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place
that they visit like throwing garbage in its proper
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place
.
Besides
that, those
also
are suggested
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before
deciding to
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go to somewhere
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places
, they
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have to
look for the aiming
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countries
in order to
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make
adapted with the society.
For instance
,
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some
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countries
might be, do not
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allow
foreign visitors to consume drugs in
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tourism
place.

To conclude
, I
utterly
believe that
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tourism
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place
also
has
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negative
effects like broke up the original
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culture
of the local society, and cause the environment pollution.
On the other hand
, the way to
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reduce
that problem is tourists
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have to
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show
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good
attitude wherever they are.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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