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Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. v. 2
It is obvious that the fundamental training courses for teaching always has been a controversial issue, while some people believe that being a good teacher does not need any training courses, I completely agree that there is no way getting professional without any training and education. Many students in high school nowadays are keen to get proper education from the best instructors and teachers. However, there are plenty of teachers in the school but few of them are have a sound knowledge of teaching their subjects. It is argued that experience is enough for being an expert in teaching. Considering that having an experience is helpful to face any situation and controlling the hyperactive students in the classroom. Also without any doubt, experienced teachers always examine each single students who are at the classroom and treat them on their knowledge. In addition, many teachers with a lot of experience prefer to come to school every day and do their tasks on behalf of their students along with parents meeting and discuses the matters which occur in specific students. However, being experienced without any training and knowledge is definitely a disadvantage for both teacher and students as well. Many educational institutes are hiring teachers frequently but the majority of them doesn’t know how to handle the students and some times they are struggling with the subjects that they suppose to teach to the students. That is the reason why education departments in many countries are introduced a teaching training school to learn and get a better knowledge of the new educational system and strategies. Moreover, they can being alert on the new syllabus of what they teaching and update on each year. In conclusion, although some believe that teaching courses are not really necessary, I believe that without any knowledge of training methods are obviously become a downside on teaching skills and it will be an obstacle for each single teachers who dream to become expert in teaching in the future.
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does not need any
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agree
that there is no way getting professional without any
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and education.

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students
in high
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nowadays are keen to
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get
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few of them are
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knowledge
of
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their subjects. It
is argued
that experience is
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enough
for being an expert in
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teaching
. Considering that having an experience is helpful to face any situation and controlling the hyperactive
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students
in the classroom.
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without any doubt, experienced
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teachers
always examine each single
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students
who are at the classroom and treat them on their
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knowledge
.
In addition
,
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teachers
with
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a lot of
experience prefer to
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come
to
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school
every day and do their tasks on behalf of their
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students
along with parents meeting and discuses the matters which occur in specific students.

However
,
being experienced
without any
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training
and
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knowledge
is definitely a disadvantage for both
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teacher
and
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students
as well
.
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Many
educational institutes are hiring
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teachers
frequently
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but
the majority of them doesn’t know how to handle the
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students
and
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some
times they are struggling with the subjects that they suppose to teach to the
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students
.
That is
the reason why education departments in
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many
countries
are introduced
a
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teaching
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training
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school
to learn and
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get
a better
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knowledge
of the new educational system and strategies.
Moreover
, they can being alert on the new syllabus of what they
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teaching
and update on each year.

In conclusion
, although
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some
believe that
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teaching
courses are not
really
necessary, I believe that without any
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knowledge
of
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training
methods are
obviously
become a downside on
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teaching
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skills
and it will be an obstacle for each single
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teachers
who dream to become expert in
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teaching
in the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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