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Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. v. 1
It is crucial for everyone to communicate with their family members. But some people believe that these interactions have dramatically reduced as compared to communications done between family members two decades ago, and I completely agree with this opinion. As people these days have more work to do as compared to the past, they get less amount of time to spend with their families, and as a result, a communication gap is created. For example, earlier people use to have six hours of daily work which use to give them ample amount of time to spend with their families; however, the working hours, these days, have increased to ten hours, leaving less or no time and energy to dedicate to their families. Additionally, the digital gadgets have detrimentally affected the family's get-together time. For instance, in the early days, before the invention of gadgets such as computers and mobile phones, all the family members use to sit together and talked about various agendas and problems with each other during a holiday, which helped in developing a stronger bond. In contrast, now children as well as their parents spend their spare time chatting and socialising on applications such as Whatsapp, Facebook and Instagram. They get so much engrossed in those virtual people that they hamper their actual relationships by not discussing various issues, and in the end blame the generation gap for various quarrels between parents and children. In conclusion, I firmly agree that families interact less with each other now as compared to that past because the workload has dramatically increased leaving no spare family time. Additionally, computers and mobile phones have made us too busy that we are unable to spend some quality time with our families.
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some
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people
believe that these interactions have
dramatically
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reduced
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family
members two decades ago, and I completely
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agree
with this opinion.

As
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people
these days have more work to do as compared to the past, they
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get
less amount of
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time
to
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spend
with their
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families
, and
as a result
, a communication gap
is created
.
For example
, earlier
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people
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use to
have six hours of daily work which
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use to
give them ample amount of
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time
to
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spend
with their
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families
;
however
, the working hours, these days, have increased to ten hours, leaving less or no
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time
and energy to dedicate to their families.

Additionally
, the digital gadgets have
detrimentally
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affected
the family's
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get
-together
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time
.
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, in the early days,
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before
the invention of gadgets such as computers and mobile phones, all the
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family
members
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use
to sit together and talked about various agendas and problems with each other during a holiday, which
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helped
in developing a stronger bond.
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,
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now
children
as well
as their parents
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their spare
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time
chatting and
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socialising
on applications such as
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Whatsapp
, Facebook and Instagram. They
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get
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so
much engrossed in those virtual
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people
that they hamper their actual relationships by not discussing various issues, and in the
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end
blame the generation gap for various quarrels between parents and children.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
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agree
that
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families
interact less with each other
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now
as compared to that past
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because
the workload has
dramatically
increased leaving no spare
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family
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time
.
Additionally
, computers and mobile phones have made us
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too
busy that we are unable to
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spend
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some
quality
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time
with our
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families
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that to become a good teacher you should acquire enough training while others say that teaching capabilities can be developed with experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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