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Some people claim that hardly any of the waste from factories is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for the authorities to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make factories recycle more o v.1

Some people claim that hardly any of the waste from factories is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for the authorities to make it a legal requirement. 1
This is a fact that people in various countries over the world waste a load of food they ate in shops and restaurants. I believe that there are several causes of this negative behaviour, and also some potential solutions could deal with this problem. To begin with, the first and foremost factor that causes waste of food is the dramatic rise in people's purchasing power. Due to this, they tend to purchase unnecessary products, which leads to the wastage. Secondly. Intensive cultivation provides us with enormous amounts of eatables. For instance, nowadays, a wide variety of products are available in the market. Therefore, the individuals usually buy food items more than the requirement which leads to accumulation of extra food items that perish and ultimately are thrown away. For these two reasons huge amount of eatables are wasted. To curb this menace, there are two possible remedies. Firstly, the authorities should impose penalties on the people who throw away food more than a certain limit. Secondly, awareness campaigns can motivate the masses to reduce the wastage. For example, in the underdeveloped countries like South Africa, people are living in object poverty and they do not have access to sufficient food. If people are shown their terrible conditions via pictures and video clips, probably, they will understand the prominence of food in their life. Their two measures will effectively work to central the negative trend. Having considered the topic carefully, it can be stated that the people will start to purchase the food items as per their requirement if they are about the poor plight of people living in abject poverty. Besides, people should be made aware strictly punished food for negligence.
This is a fact that
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people
in various countries over the world waste a load of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
they ate in shops and restaurants. I believe that there are several causes of this
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negative
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behaviour
, and
also
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some
potential solutions could deal with this problem.

To
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begin
with, the
first
and foremost factor that causes waste of
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food
is the dramatic rise in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's purchasing power. Due to this, they tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
unnecessary products, which leads to the wastage.
Secondly
. Intensive cultivation provides us with enormous amounts of eatables.
For instance
, nowadays, a wide variety of products are available in the market.
Therefore
, the individuals
usually
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buy
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food
items more than the requirement which leads to accumulation of extra
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food
items that perish and
ultimately
are thrown
away. For these two reasons huge amount of eatables
are wasted
.

To curb this menace, there are two possible remedies.
Firstly
, the authorities should impose penalties on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who throw away
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
more than a certain limit.
Secondly
, awareness campaigns can motivate the masses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the wastage.
For example
, in the underdeveloped countries like South Africa,
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people
are living in object
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
poverty and
they do not have access to sufficient
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food
. If
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people
are shown
their terrible conditions via pictures and video clips,
probably
, they will understand the prominence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
in their life. Their two measures will
effectively
work to central the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
trend.

Having considered the topic
carefully
, it can
be stated
that the
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people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
items as per their requirement if they are about the poor plight of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living in abject poverty.
Besides
,
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people
should
be made
aware
strictly
punished
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
for negligence.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that hardly any of the waste from factories is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for the authorities to make it a legal requirement. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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