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Some people say that the teaching method with a teacher and students in a classroom will not exist by the year 2050. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people say that the teaching method with a teacher and students in a classroom will not exist by the year 2050. v. 2
With the advance of modern technology, every aspect of life has been changed considerably. Robots or AI appear, which persuades people that human teachers will no longer exist in 2050. I totally disagree with this viewpoint as they hold values that cannot be found in programmed machines. In the first place, the main discreapancy between a human and a robot is the sympathy. Even though an artificial teacher can lecture for a long period of time without feeling exhausted with an immense reservoire of knowledge, it surely lacks the ablility to read students' mind. In contrast, a human teacher does not only teach but also listens to their stories so that he can understand learners at a deeper level. It is significant to remember that only by listening and sympathizing can a teacher discover students' actual needs. This makes learning become a humane process. Secondly, as a robot does not have emotion, it cannot create an environment where people establish a close bond. It is often mistaken that learners only need knowledge. However, this is not enough. A child coming to class mainly because he or she wants to communicate and have fun with classmates. Happiness is the feeling that every school is supposed to generate. With a non-sense robot, there is no way to achive this goal. There are some parents who advocate AI instead of human teachers believe that thei children may be safer with a machine on the grounds that no corporal punishment will be applied. It is true that the robot may not be set to punish students, even in the slightest form. Nevertheless, learners should be taught to take responsibility and in some cases, punishing is unavoidable. It is like the fact that every country needs prisons for criminals. In conclusion, robots may replace teachers in some parts of the traditional teaching process, but they will never take the emotional and spiritual role as excellently as qualified teachers.
With the advance of modern technology, every aspect of life has been
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changed
considerably
. Robots or AI appear, which persuades
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people
that
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human
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
will no longer exist in 2050. I
totally
disagree with this viewpoint as they hold values that cannot
be found
in programmed machines.

In the
first
place, the main
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discreapancy
between a
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human
and a robot is the sympathy.
Even though
an artificial
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teacher
can lecture for a long period of time without feeling exhausted with an immense
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reservoire
of knowledge, it
surely
lacks the
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ablility
to read
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students&
#039; mind.
In contrast
, a
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human
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teacher
does not
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only
teach
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but
also
listens to their stories
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so
that he can understand learners at a deeper level. It is significant to remember that
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only
by listening and sympathizing can a
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teacher
discover
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students&
#039; actual needs.
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makes
learning
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become
a
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humane
process.

Secondly
, as a robot does not have emotion, it cannot create an environment where
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people
establish a close bond. It is
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often
mistaken that learners
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only
need knowledge.
However
, this is not
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enough
. A child coming to
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class
mainly
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because
he or she wants to communicate and have fun with classmates. Happiness is the feeling that every school
is supposed
to generate. With a non-sense robot, there is no way to
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achive
this goal.

There are
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some
parents who advocate AI
instead
of
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human
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teachers
believe that
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thei
children may be safer with a machine on the grounds that no corporal punishment will
be applied
. It is true that the robot may not
be set
to punish students, even in the slightest form.
Nevertheless
, learners should
be taught
to take responsibility and in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cases, punishing is unavoidable. It is like the fact that every country needs prisons for criminals.

In conclusion
, robots may replace
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teachers
in
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some
parts of the traditional teaching process,
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but
they will never take the emotional and spiritual role as
excellently
as qualified
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the teaching method with a teacher and students in a classroom will not exist by the year 2050. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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