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Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.1

Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 1
With the invention of the Internet and all its possibilities, the traditional educational setting of a room full of students with a teacher standing in front giving instruction, has been challenged. It has been predicted that this style of teaching will soon vanish but I’m quite confident that the traditional classroom may diminish but will never disappear. For university students, it is certainly true that there are numerous benefits to distance learning. Lectures can be viewed on a computer from anywhere the Internet is available and often whenever it is convenient. Nowadays this is becoming more common, and the trend will most likely continue to grow. However, distance learning is not really feasible when it comes to elementary and high school students who lack the maturity for self-study and need face-to-face interaction with a teacher. There are other drawbacks to eliminating the traditional classroom. For example, it is difficult for students to engage in classroom discussions with each other through a computer and as a result the classroom dynamic will probably suffer due to the absence of energy in the lessons. What is more, without a classroom atmosphere, students, who get most of their knowledge from the teacher, will miss out on learning from each other. It is also important to remember that courses such as chemistry and biology are interactive and require a lab setting, so distance learning is not really possible. In conclusion, the elimination of classroom learning will continue, but this trend will be limited to mostly adult education and courses which do not require an interactive academic environment. I’m quite sure that thirty years from now students and teachers will still be spending time together in the classroom.
With the invention of the Internet and all its possibilities, the traditional educational setting of a room full of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
with a teacher standing in front giving instruction, has
been challenged
. It has
been predicted
that this style of teaching will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
vanish
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I’m quite confident that the traditional classroom may diminish
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
will never disappear.

For university
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students
, it is
certainly
true that there are numerous benefits to distance
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
. Lectures can
be viewed
on a computer from anywhere the Internet is available and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
whenever it is convenient. Nowadays this is becoming more common, and the trend will most likely continue to grow.
However
, distance
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learning
is not
really
feasible when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to elementary and high school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who lack the maturity for self-study and need face-to-face interaction with a teacher.

There are other drawbacks to eliminating the traditional classroom.
For example
, it is difficult for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to engage in classroom discussions with each other through a computer and
as a result
the classroom dynamic will
probably
suffer due to the absence of energy in the lessons.
What is more
, without a classroom atmosphere,
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students
, who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
most of their knowledge from the teacher, will miss out on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
from each other. It is
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to remember that courses such as chemistry and biology are interactive and require a lab setting,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
distance
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learning
is not
really
possible.

In conclusion
, the elimination of classroom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
will continue,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
this trend will
be limited
to
mostly
adult education and courses which do not require an interactive academic environment. I’m quite sure that thirty years from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
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students
and teachers will
still
be spending time together in the classroom.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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