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Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.2

Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 2
Education plays a vital role in the life of students as well as teachers. A recent rise in the online learning has resulted in a system where the dynamics of student's and teacher's working are drastically changed. This essay will discuss these changing trends between the two with the evolution of technology. In recent times, people prefer to study online. With the advancement in technology many people are opting for online studies rather than going to classrooms, since it is more effective and convenient. For instance, they can simply login to websites and study without leaving their homes and to understand the topic better they can repeat the lectures on the laptop. A recent study has shown that online learning is nearly 20 percentage more effective than attending classrooms. Although there are many aspects in which the online learning precedes the classrooms, there are some aspects of on campus studying that can never be replaced by online studies. Firstly, some subjects requires performing practical examinations, which can never be done via internet. To exemplify, subjects in science, namely, physics and chemistry require students to perform experiments in labs. Secondly, some subjects require people's interactions as a part of the subject which cannot be achieved through online education. For instance, subjects such as mass communication require students to interact with people in person. To summarise, there are many aspects of current campus based education that will be replaced by online learning in the future. This essay discussed despite the major studying paradigm will move towards online education, some aspects of campus based learning is irreplaceable.
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Education
plays a vital role in the life of students
as well
as teachers. A recent rise in the
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online
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learning
has resulted in a system where the dynamics of student's and teacher's working are
drastically
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changed
. This essay will discuss these changing trends between the two with the evolution of technology.

In recent times,
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people
prefer to
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study
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online
. With the advancement in technology
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many
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people
are opting for
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online
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studies
rather
than going to classrooms, since it is more effective and convenient.
For instance
, they can
simply
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login
to websites and
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study
without leaving their homes and to understand the topic better they can repeat the lectures on the laptop. A recent
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study
has shown that
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online
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learning
is
nearly
20 percentage more effective than attending classrooms.

Although there are
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many
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aspects
in which the
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online
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learning
precedes the classrooms, there are
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some
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aspects
of on campus studying that can never
be replaced
by
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online
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studies
.
Firstly
,
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some
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subjects
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requires
performing practical examinations, which can never
be done
via internet. To exemplify,
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subjects
in science,
namely
, physics and chemistry
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require
students to perform experiments in labs.
Secondly
,
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some
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subjects
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require
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people
's interactions as a part of the
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subject
which cannot
be achieved
through
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online
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education
.
For instance
,
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subjects
such as mass communication
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require
students to interact with
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people
in person.

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summarise
, there are
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many
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aspects
of
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current
campus based
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education
that will
be replaced
by
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online
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learning
in the future. This essay discussed despite the major studying paradigm will
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move
towards
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online
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education
,
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some
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aspects
of campus based
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learning
is irreplaceable.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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