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Some people say that the only reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people say that the only reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 2
In this contemporary era, the world is changing by leaps and bounds. People are more travelling in abroad countries for expansion of businesses. So, some people believe that the only reason for learning foreign language is this whereas the others argue that there are several reasons to learn outlandish language. I totally agree on there are many reasons to learn another language. First and foremost, there are only few languages which are dominated all over the world. Also, industries and multinational companies use these languages for better communication with their customers because they have customers in all over the world. Due to this, if a person needs a job in these companies then he or she should learn that language for the acquiring the job. Moreover, in many nations, the lectures given in the colleges and schools are in English, so students will not face and difficulties related to languages after their studies. On the other hand, there are several other reasons for learning foreign languages. Firstly, learning outlandish language not only gives knowledge about that language, but also it gives knowledge about the culture and tradition of that country as well. Owing to this, people understand the views of foreigners and think differently than the other local layman. At last, people become more broad minded with knowledge of another language. Due to this, people think more freely. In my view, many nations have a diverse culture and there are many local languages are spoken in those regions. The people of those countries survive without the knowledge of other languages. These people can trade easily with multinational companies because they appoint a person who translate that language into the local tongue. For example, there are many Chinese businessmen who do not even know and speak another language, but they trade easily with these companies. To keep issues in the prospects, learning a different language ought to be not only for satisfying our physical needs, but also our moral needs, because never before had such a big thirst for knowledge been displayed.
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People
are more travelling in abroad countries for expansion of businesses.
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,
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some
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people
believe that the
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reason
for
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learning
foreign
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language
is this whereas the others argue that there are several
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reasons
to learn outlandish
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language
. I
totally
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agree
on there are
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many
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reasons
to learn another language.

First
and foremost, there are
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only
few
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languages
which
are dominated
all over the world.
Also
, industries and multinational
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companies
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use
these
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languages
for better communication with their customers
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because
they have customers in all over the world. Due to this, if a person needs a job in these
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companies
then he or she should learn that
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language
for the acquiring the job.
Moreover
, in
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many
nations, the lectures
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given
in the colleges and schools are in English,
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so
students will not face and difficulties related to
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languages
after their studies.

On the
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other
hand, there are several
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other
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reasons
for
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learning
foreign
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languages
.
Firstly
,
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learning
outlandish
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language
not
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only
gives
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knowledge
about that
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language
,
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but
also
it gives
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knowledge
about the culture and tradition of that country
as well
. Owing to this,
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people
understand the views of foreigners and
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think
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differently
than the
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other
local layman. At last,
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people
become more
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broad minded
with
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knowledge
of another
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language
. Due to this,
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people
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think
more
freely
.

In my view,
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many
nations have a diverse culture and there are
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many
local
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languages
are spoken
in those regions. The
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people
of those countries survive without the
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knowledge
of
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other
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languages
. These
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people
can trade
easily
with multinational
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companies
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because
they appoint a person who translate that
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language
into the local tongue.
For example
, there are
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many
Chinese businessmen who do not even know and speak another
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language
,
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but
they trade
easily
with these
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companies
.

To
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keep
issues in the prospects,
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learning
a
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different
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language
ought to be not
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only
for satisfying our physical needs,
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but
also
our moral needs,
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because
never
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before
had such a
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big
thirst for
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knowledge
been displayed
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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