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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 4
Individuals may have various reasons for learning a new language. Some folks opine that working overseas and travel are the sole reasons behind that, however others believe some other desires are involved in perusing a foreign language. In the following paragraphs, I am going to delve both opinions and elaborate on them. Learning a new language, first of all, is so demanding in terms of time and effort. Taking the first step to learning a language, one have to allocate hefty amount of his daily time and energy for accomplishing that. In other words, one cannot consider it as a pampering pursuit in his idle time. When I started learning French as my third language, I almost practiced at least one hour a day for just building the corn stones of this new language. Thus, Should someone get a through command of one language, they might dedicate majority of their idle time developing the building blocks of that language. Considering these provisions for learning, some individuals are of the opinion that only making money in the destination country or visiting there can make some one convinced to become multilingual. On the other hand, some argue that there should be diverse stimulus for learning a new language. Although it is time consuming and onerous, they may have reflected on the other incentives such as getting familiar with foreign cultures or enjoying their arts. As Language and culture are intrinsically linked, One can enjoy destination’s music and movies by knowing the language and the advantages are not only confined to being present in destination’s territory. Other benefits engendered by being multilingual is doing translations. Such is the importance of second language proficiency that some people may easily find a lucrative job through translating some lines of that language. As a result, the earned remuneration is totally worth the difficulties of learning. Furthermore, as demonstrating a movie worldwide necessitates movie translations, some producers hire subtitle translators in order to reach higher audiences and release it globally. Therefore, movie translation which is both desirable and remunerative can be individual’s stimuli to embark on learning a language. To conclude, even though there are various views regarding the aims of language learning, I hold the opinion that language can have multitude compelling benefits and it is not solely restrained to working in destination country or travel.
Individuals may have various reasons for
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folks opine that working overseas and travel are the sole reasons behind that,
however
others believe
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other
desires
are involved
in perusing a foreign
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language
. In the following paragraphs, I am going to delve both opinions and elaborate on them.

Learning a
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new
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language
,
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first of all
, is
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so
demanding in terms of
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time
and effort. Taking the
first
step to
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learning
a
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language
, one
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have to
allocate hefty amount of his daily
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time
and energy for accomplishing that. In
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other
words, one cannot consider it as a pampering pursuit in his idle
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time
. When I
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started
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learning
French as my third
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language
, I almost practiced at least one hour a day for
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just
building the corn stones of this
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new
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language
.
Thus
, Should someone
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get
a
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through
command of one
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language
, they might dedicate
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majority of
their idle
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time
developing the building blocks of that
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language
. Considering these provisions for
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learning
,
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some
individuals are of the opinion that
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only
making money in the
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destination
country or visiting there can
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make
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some one
convinced
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to become
multilingual.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
argue that there should be diverse stimulus for
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learning
a
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new
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language
. Although it is
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time consuming
and onerous, they may have reflected on the
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other
incentives such as getting familiar with foreign cultures or enjoying their arts. As
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Language
and culture are
intrinsically
linked, One can enjoy
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destination’s
music and
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movies
by knowing the
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language
and the advantages are not
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only
confined to being present in
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destination’s
territory.
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Other
benefits engendered by being multilingual is doing translations. Such is the importance of second
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language
proficiency that
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some
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people
may
easily
find a lucrative job through translating
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some
lines of that
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language
.
As a result
, the earned remuneration is
totally
worth the difficulties of
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learning
.
Furthermore
, as demonstrating a
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movie
worldwide necessitates
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movie
translations,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
producers hire subtitle translators in order to reach higher audiences and release it globally.
Therefore
,
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movie
translation which is both desirable and remunerative can be individual’s stimuli to embark on
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learning
a language.

To conclude
,
even though
there are various views regarding the aims of
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language
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learning
, I hold the opinion that
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language
can have multitude compelling benefits and it is not
solely
restrained to working in
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destination
country or travel.
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45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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