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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.10

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 10
The world has countries, states, and cities speaking an ample number of languages of different varieties and accents. Although it is an added benefit for a person if he has the knowledge of the local language he is working at or travelling in, some people feel that these are not the only reasons for one to familiarise oneself with foreign languages. In my opinion, I believe that the awareness of non-native languages should not be restricted to a workplace or a travel destination. Admittedly, on the one hand, knowing languages of the area we reside in and are employed at is a necessity considering that the modern work culture does not focus at only one place or involve employees of just one region. In other words, workers of varied languages tend to come together under one roof and work together towards a common goal. Hence being familiar with foreign languages enhances communication and helps in creating a bond with people of other cultures and traditions. For example, IT companies hire people from different regions of the country and most of the time its the language that connects and brings them close to one another. On the other hand, despite mentioning the above points, I believe languages are not limited or learned just for survival. A language has the potential of improving an individual's personality to a large extent. For instance, languages develop and increases one's respect towards people of another region residing in the society. Furthermore, language familiarity encourages one to access books, writtings, and scripts inscribed in a foreign language thereby intellectually enhancing thoughts and ideas which reflects in their lifestyle. In conclusion, I think possessing knowledge of other languages not only favors at the residing place or the workplace, but will improve one's personality bringing about a change in his thought process and way of life.
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language
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people
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reasons for one to
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familiarise
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languages
. In my opinion, I believe that the awareness of non-native
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languages
should not
be restricted
to a workplace or a travel destination.

Admittedly
, on the one hand, knowing
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languages
of the area we reside in and
are employed
at is a necessity considering that the modern work culture does not focus at
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only
one place or involve employees of
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just
one region. In
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other
words, workers of varied
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languages
tend to
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come
together under one roof and work together towards a common goal.
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Hence
being familiar with foreign
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languages
enhances communication and
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helps
in creating a bond with
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people
of
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other
cultures and traditions.
For example
, IT
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companies
hire
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people
from
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different
regions of the country and most of the time
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its
the
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language
that connects and brings them close to one another.

On the
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other
hand, despite mentioning the above points, I believe
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languages
are not limited or learned
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just
for survival. A
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language
has the potential of improving an individual's personality to a large extent.
For instance
,
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languages
develop and increases one's respect towards
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people
of another region residing in the society.
Furthermore
,
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language
familiarity encourages one to access books,
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writtings
, and scripts inscribed in a foreign
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language
thereby
intellectually
enhancing thoughts and
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ideas
which reflects in their lifestyle.

In conclusion
, I
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think
possessing knowledge of
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other
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languages
not
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only
favors at the residing place or the workplace,
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but
will
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improve
one's personality bringing about a
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change
in his
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thought
process and way of life.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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