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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1
People have different views about why people are interested in learning a foreign language. Some people say that a foreign language can help them to work and travel easily in overseas while others believe that there are more reasons to study a foreign language than reasons for work or travel. In my point of view, I agree that a foreign language can bring more benefits for people than two reasons above. On one hand, it is obvious that foreign language plays a significant role in helping people to live in overseas for both working and traveling areas. Firstly it allows people communicate easily with local residents. Understanding of a favorite of local food is usually a difficult part for foreigner if they do not know about local language. Therefore, if traveller can speak a foreign language they might be considered as a part of local community as well as be welcomed to visit resident’s houses. Furthermore, a foreign language enables people to work effectively in their areas. For example, applying jobs in American, employees must influence English as a part of employer’s requirement in oder to meet the highest quality standard of working. On the other hand, there are more benefits for people who learn a new language. First of all, People can study abroad if they have a foreign language. Without a new language, students are not allowed to get a visa in which countries’s they like to study a higher education. For example, if Vietnamese students want to study Master in Australia they have to gain at least 6. 5 ielts in academic score to be accepted to enroll universities. In addition, Learning a new language is help people to discover the world. For example, the world can be explored by watching Discovery channel at home instead of going overseas. In short, it helps people who want to learn a news thing just being at home and reduces the cost to travel. In conclusion, Although learning a new language allows people to word and travel effectively in out side of their home countries, it seems to me that a foreign language brings more benefits for people who learn them.
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than two reasons above.

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in overseas for both working and traveling areas.
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residents. Understanding of a favorite of
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food is
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.
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they might
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local
community
as well
as
be welcomed
to visit resident’s
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houses
.
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enables
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to work
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On the other hand
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people
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language
.
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. Without a
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Master in Australia they
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gain at least 6. 5
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in academic score to be
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accepted
to enroll universities.
In addition
, Learning a
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language
is
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help
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people
to discover the world.
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, the world can
be explored
by watching Discovery channel at home
instead
of going overseas. In short, it
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helps
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people
who want to learn a
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news
thing
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being at home and
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reduces
the cost to travel.

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14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in that country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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