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Some people say that the main environment problem of our times is the loss of particular species od plants and animals. Other say that there is more important environmental problem v.1

Some people say that the main environment problem of our times is the loss of particular species od plants and animals. Other say that there is more important environmental problem v. 1
The nature surrounding us is called environment. The surroundings are decaying gradually, and some specialists say that it is due to the lose of wildlife. Besides, there are other natural causes that emerge some environmental effects. It is the climate without which, we the human, unable to survive. Human life, mostly depends on the nature, and day by day, they are facing a sort of difficulties. This is because, there is a gradual lose of ambient. Wildlife, in particular plants and animals, are losing from the environs, and is due to the human activities. People around the nature are cutting trees, and slaughtering wild animals to meet their own purposes. For example, the late last year, the lung of the world so called the Amazon faced a huge environmental destruction, which included both plants and animals. In contrast, the ambience is also shrinking due to natural disasters. This includes, erosion of soil, pollution of water, soil, air, and these also cause various environmental problems. These phenomena involve reduction of plants and animals, and also the decaying of the world's carbon-di-oxide and oxygen balance. The increment of temperature around the world causes the melting of ice in polar reason. Besides, this causes the rising of sea level. Both of these phenomena affect the climate very badly. In conclusion, it is said that the atmosphere is facing various problems due to the loss of plants and animal species. It, moreover, encounters a sort of negative effect due to the natural consequences. Humans are facing various bad situations, and these are the ultimate result of environmental problems.
The nature surrounding us
is called
environment. The surroundings are decaying
gradually
, and
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some
specialists say that it is
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due
to the
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lose
of wildlife.
Besides
, there are other natural
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causes
that emerge
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some
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environmental
effects.

It is the climate without which, we the
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human
, unable to survive.
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Human
life,
mostly
depends on the nature, and day by day, they are facing a sort of difficulties. This is
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because
, there is a gradual lose of ambient.

Wildlife,
in particular
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plants
and
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animals
, are losing from the environs, and is
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due
to the
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human
activities.
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People
around the nature are cutting trees, and slaughtering wild
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animals
to
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meet
their
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own
purposes.
For example
, the late last year, the lung of the world
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so
called the Amazon faced a huge
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environmental
destruction, which included both
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plants
and animals.

In contrast
, the ambience is
also
shrinking
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due
to natural disasters. This includes, erosion of soil, pollution of water, soil, air, and these
also
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cause
various
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environmental
problems. These phenomena involve reduction of
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plants
and
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animals
, and
also
the decaying of the world's
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carbon-di-oxide
and oxygen balance.

The increment of temperature around the world
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causes
the melting of ice in polar reason.
Besides
, this
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causes
the rising of sea level. Both of these phenomena affect the climate
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very
badly
.

In conclusion
, it
is said
that the atmosphere is facing various problems
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due
to the loss of
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plants
and
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animal
species. It,
moreover
, encounters a sort of
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negative
effect
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due
to the natural consequences.
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Humans
are facing various
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bad
situations, and these are the ultimate result of
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environmental
problems.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environment problem of our times is the loss of particular species od plants and animals. Other say that there is more important environmental problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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