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Some people say that the best way is to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that the best way is to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 1
Increasing transit in today’s society is leading to serious accidents which eventually take the lives of people. I disagree to a greater extent that to increase the legal youth to drive vehicles, as there are many other factors which needs to be tackled to increase drive security. Primarily, transport congestion in today’s need to be taken care of. It is need of proper transportation management of government like installing movement, lights, providing live travel status on an app / website, creating proper pedestrian crossing and many more. Statistically, lots of people lost lives in roadway accidents due to factors like over speeding, inaccurate driving, not taking precautions while driving. Governments should create awareness among the public for roadway freedom measures. The other way to improve this situation is to create proper and convenient public transport facilities. If a public transport is cheaper, convenient, easier to travel than a person will prefer public transport over personal vehicles. However, neophytes are more enthusiastic to drive a car or to ride a bike at a younger maturity. Although teenagers are allowed to ride a vehicle having lower specifications (such as 110cc moped) at a younger age, they ride at an overspeed in city areas which eventually, turn into fatalities. Looking for the above scenario, in order to improve drive security, legal youth to ride a car or bike should be increased only up to a year or two. Other than that, Nowadays youngsters also challenge among their friends, doing stunts, racing competition on vehicles among themselves and also using vehicles for entertainment rather than need. To sum up, it is essential to improve other factors which play a major role in roadway accidents rather than increasing roadway safety. Government should take effective steps to improve roadway safety and to curb fatalities of loss of lives on roadway.
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today
’s society is leading to serious accidents which
eventually
take the
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lives
of
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people
. I disagree to a greater extent that to increase the legal youth to
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drive
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vehicles
, as there are
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many
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other
factors which needs to
be tackled
to increase
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drive
security.

Primarily
,
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transport
congestion in
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today
’s need to
be taken
care of. It
is need
of proper transportation management of
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government
like installing movement, lights, providing
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live
travel status on an app / website, creating proper pedestrian crossing and
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many
more.
Statistically
, lots of
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people
lost
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lives
in
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roadway
accidents due to factors like over speeding, inaccurate driving, not taking precautions while driving.
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Governments
should create awareness among the
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public
for
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roadway
freedom measures. The
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other
way to
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improve
this situation is to create proper and convenient
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public
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transport
facilities. If a
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public
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transport
is cheaper, convenient, easier to travel than a person will prefer
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public
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transport
over personal vehicles.

However
, neophytes are more enthusiastic to
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drive
a car or to
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ride
a bike at a younger maturity. Although
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teenagers
are
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allowed
to
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ride
a
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vehicle
having lower specifications (such as 110cc moped) at a younger age, they
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ride
at an
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overspeed
in city areas which
eventually
, turn into fatalities. Looking for the above scenario, in order to
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improve
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drive
security, legal youth to
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ride
a car or bike should
be increased
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only
up to a year or two.
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Other
than that, Nowadays youngsters
also
challenge among their friends, doing stunts, racing competition on
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vehicles
among themselves and
also
using
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vehicles
for entertainment
rather
than need.

To sum up, it is essential to
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improve
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other
factors which play a major role in
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roadway
accidents
rather
than increasing
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roadway
safety.
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Government
should take effective steps to
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improve
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roadway
safety and to curb fatalities of loss of
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lives
on
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roadway
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that the best way is to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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