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Newspapers and books are outdated. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion? v.1

Newspapers and books are outdated. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion? v. 1
Books and newspaper have revolutionized the outlook of people by bringing about a sea change in the way individuals think, live and work. But, the emergence of electronic media such as radio, television, computers and computer-based technology make some think that books and newspapers have become obsolete. This essay, however, does not agree with this view since they will have their relevance for all days to come. Habitually, most people depend on books, newspaper and television for news and entertainment. However, with the emergence of the Internet, the scenario is changing. Now more people depend on televisions and the Internet for news, entertainment and information. Many authoritative books in different disciplines are now available on the Internet. And, some reputed magazines in the West are now published on the Internet only. These e-books are similar to conventional books as regards to form and presentation. This transformation in trends makes many think that the conventional newspapers and books are outmoded (=old fashioned). In contrast, the fact remains that the amount of information one gets from television is negligible. For instance, in the UK, an hour of television news broadcast covers only as much news as covered by the front page of a broadcast. In addition, in a world, in which digital divide remains a stark reality, to argue that books and newspapers are outdated is preposterous. As long as the human race continues to exist on earth, books and newspapers will also continue to prevail because many people derive some pleasure from reading these in the conventional way. Briefly, many people are more comfortable with electronic media than with paper media. Both argue that books and newspapers are disappearing because of electronic media is quite meaningless.
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Books
and
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newspaper
have revolutionized the outlook of
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people
by bringing about a sea
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change
in the way individuals
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think
,
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live
and work.
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But
, the emergence of electronic
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media
such as radio,
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television
, computers and computer-based technology
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make
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some
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think
that
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books
and
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newspapers
have become obsolete. This essay,
however
, does not
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agree
with this view since they will have their relevance for all days to
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come
.

Habitually
, most
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people
depend on
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books
,
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newspaper
and
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television
for
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news
and entertainment.
However
, with the emergence of the Internet, the scenario is changing.
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Now
more
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people
depend on
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televisions
and the Internet for
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news
, entertainment and information.
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Many
authoritative
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books
in
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different
disciplines are
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now
available on the Internet. And,
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some
reputed magazines in the West are
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now
published on the Internet
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only
. These e-books are similar to conventional
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books
as regards to form and presentation. This transformation in trends
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makes
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many
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think
that the conventional
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newspapers
and
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books
are outmoded
(=
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old fashioned
).

In contrast
, the fact remains that the amount of information one
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gets
from
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television
is negligible.
For instance
, in the UK, an hour of
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television
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news
broadcast covers
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only
as much
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news
as covered by the front page of a broadcast.
In addition
, in a world, in which digital divide remains a stark reality, to argue that
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books
and
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newspapers
are outdated
is preposterous. As long as the human race continues to exist on earth,
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books
and
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newspapers
will
also
continue to prevail
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because
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many
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people
derive
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some
pleasure from reading these in the conventional way.

Briefly
,
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many
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people
are more comfortable with electronic
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media
than with paper
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media
. Both argue that
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books
and
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newspapers
are disappearing
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because
of electronic
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media
is quite meaningless.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Newspapers and books are outdated. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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