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Some people say that supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of the consumers to avoid such products. Discuss and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of the consumers to avoid such products. Discuss and give your opinion. v. 1
Although, many believe that consumers are responsible for choosing products with lesser amount of packaging, others still consider that it is the supermarkets' responsibility to reduce this problem. In my view, the decision of supermarkets about reducing the amount of packaging is very influential to the people's mindset and so, they are more responsible about this. On the one hand, some think that supermarkets have greater role in decreasing the amount of product packaging as they are the seller and I agree. This means that they have control over the goods that they sell and so as with the packaging that they use. Canadian supermarkets, for instance, are now keeping the volume of plastic packaging that they use in fewer amounts to help the country become plastic-free. This has been influencing the public as they bring reusable bags for grocery shopping and opting not to use more plastic packaging. On the other hand, others argue that consumers share a big responsibility as well in keeping the number of product packaging low due to their freedom as buyers. In other words, individuals can fully decide which store sells products with lesser amount of packaging. An example would be Amazon, which is an online supermarket, that allows people to choose how many packages per shipping. This has greatly reduced the problem and thus, can help in the future generations to come. In conclusion, although opinions of people vary, I consider that supermarkets share more responsibility on the issue of reducing the packaging amounts of goods as they have a huge control over their sales.
Although,
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many
believe that consumers are responsible for choosing
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products
with lesser
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amount
of
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packaging
, others
still
consider that it is the supermarkets' responsibility to
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reduce
this problem. In my view, the decision of supermarkets about reducing the
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amount
of
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packaging
is
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very
influential to the
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people
's mindset and
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so
, they are more responsible about this.

On the one hand,
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some
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think
that supermarkets have greater role in decreasing the
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amount
of
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product
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packaging
as they are the seller and I
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agree
. This means that they have control over the
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goods
that they sell and
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so
as with the
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packaging
that they
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use
. Canadian supermarkets,
for instance
, are
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now
keeping the volume of plastic
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packaging
that they
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use
in fewer
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amounts
to
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help
the country become plastic-free. This has been influencing the public as they bring reusable bags for grocery shopping and opting not to
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use
more plastic packaging.

On the
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other
hand, others argue that consumers share a
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big
responsibility
as well
in keeping the number of
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product
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packaging
low due to their freedom as buyers. In
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other
words, individuals can
fully
decide which store sells
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products
with lesser
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amount
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
. An example would be Amazon, which is an online supermarket, that
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allows
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people
to choose how
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many
packages per shipping. This has
greatly
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reduced
the problem and
thus
, can
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help
in the future generations to
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come
.

In conclusion
, although opinions of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
vary, I consider that supermarkets share more responsibility on the issue of reducing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
amounts
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
as they have a huge control over their sales.
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IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of the consumers to avoid such products. Discuss and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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