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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 8
One of the more recent environmental topics, that has been discussed, is who has responsibility for product packaging; is it those that make it and sell it, or those that buy it? The following essay will go both sides of this dilemma and explain why I believe it should be the manufacturers/sellers that should take on the responsibility of reducing the packing with products. Let first look at the consumers. When people buy a product, whether this is a loaf of bread or an iPhone, they don’t have any choice about how much packaging is used. They can choose not to buy a particular product if they feel that the producers use too much, but in my opinion, this is an unlikely circumstance as most people either won’t even think about the packaging, or if they do, won’t be too bothered about it. Looking at the flip side of this situation, I believe that, as it’s the manufacturers and supermarkets that are creating the products and buying them from suppliers before selling, they should be the ones that have a duty to reduce, as much as possible, any packaging particularly if it’s plastic. Some companies such as Apple have already made moves to limit the amount of superfluous space in order to reduce the waste it creates. Overall then, I firmly believe that the companies that produce and sell packaging should be the ones responsible for limiting the waste packing that enters the environment rather than the consumer, as they have no control over the amount used.
One of the more recent environmental topics, that has
been discussed
, is who has responsibility for
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product
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packaging
; is it those that
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make
it and sell it, or those that
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buy
it? The following essay will go both sides of this dilemma and
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explain
why I believe it should be the manufacturers/sellers that should take on the responsibility of reducing the packing with products.

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first
look at the consumers. When
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people
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buy
a
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product
, whether this is a loaf of bread or an iPhone, they don’t have any choice about how much
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packaging
is
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used
. They can choose not to
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buy
a particular
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product
if they feel that the producers
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use
too much,
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but
in my opinion, this is an unlikely circumstance as most
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people
either won’t even
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think
about the
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packaging
, or if they do, won’t be too bothered about it.

Looking at the flip side of this situation, I believe that, as it’s the manufacturers and supermarkets that are creating the
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products
and buying them from suppliers
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before
selling, they should be the
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ones
that have a duty to
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reduce
, as much as possible, any
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packaging
particularly
if it’s plastic.
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Some
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companies
such as Apple have already made
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moves
to limit the amount of superfluous space in order to
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reduce
the waste it creates.

Overall
then, I
firmly
believe that the
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companies
that produce and sell
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packaging
should be the
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ones
responsible for limiting the waste packing that enters the environment
rather
than the consumer, as they have no control over the amount
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used
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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