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some people say that smartphones anh the internet are the reasons for breaking communication among family members. what's your opinion v.1

some people say that smartphones anh the internet are the reasons for breaking communication among family members. what's your opinion v. 1
In today's world, television is ever increasing. It is one of the most important things in human life. Some people believe that video has demolished communication among friends and family. In my opinion, however, the opposite is true. Television can increase conversation in the interest of the following reasons. Television programs give us things to think and talk about. These days it is possible to hear news every time we turn on the audio. We hear about things happening all around the earth. Everybody has opinions about these things and everybody wants to discuss their opinions with other people. So, TV news and information programs encourage us to discuss our ideas with our friends and family. Now people in every part of the nature have access to the same TV programs. When you go to a new city to work, study, or take a vacation, you will already have something in common with the people there. When you meet new people, you will be familiar with at least some of the same TV programs. This gives you something to talk about. Most people use TV as a way of entertainment. People who play sports usually like to watch sports on TV. People who like to cook, watch cooking shows. If your friends and family watch some of the same programs as you watch, they can learn more about things that interest you. This is a form of delivery that helps people to create mutual understanding among them. In conclusion, these types of contact technology have brought people from all over the world closer together.
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ever increasing
. It is one of the most
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important
things in human life.
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Some
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people
believe that video has demolished communication among friends and family. In my opinion,
however
, the opposite is true. Television can increase conversation in the interest of the following reasons.

Television
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programs
give us things to
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think
and talk about. These days it is possible to hear
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news
every time we turn on the audio. We hear about things happening all around the earth. Everybody has opinions about these things and everybody wants to discuss their opinions with other
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people
.
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, TV
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news
and information
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programs
encourage us to discuss our
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ideas
with our friends and family.

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Now
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people
in every part of the nature have access to the same TV
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programs
. When you go to a
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new
city to work, study, or take a vacation, you will already have something in common with the
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people
there. When you
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meet
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new
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people
, you will be familiar with at least
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some of the
same TV
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programs
. This gives you something to talk about.

Most
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people
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use
TV as a way of entertainment.
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People
who play sports
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like to
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watch
sports on TV.
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People
who like to cook,
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watch
cooking
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shows
. If your friends and family
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watch
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some of the
same
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programs
as you
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watch
, they can learn more about things that interest you. This is a form of delivery that
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helps
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people
to create mutual understanding among them.

In conclusion
, these types of contact technology have brought
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people
from all over the world closer together.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay some people say that smartphones anh the internet are the reasons for breaking communication among family members. what's your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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