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Some people say that self-esteem employment is better than working for a company or institution. Discuss both point of view. What is your opinion. v.2

Some people say that self-esteem employment is better than working for a company or institution. What is your opinion. v. 2
" Money is not only the answer but it makes a difference" In the current time of technological advancement, one of the most pressing concerns is regarding the given topic that which works is better; self - employment or works in other company, institute? I shall explore the same from various aspects in the following paragraphs. If we look both side of the argument, that which is depends upon person thinking through their working process. On one side, the person have own business that is more better from other because they took own discussion according to requirement. Moreover, that is person no any of anyone. Although, they decided by own wish furthermore, this type of person is make discussion maker person. Afterthat, they gives the order to they employees related working process. On moving, for instance, survey is conducted by NIC company about self employed is much better rather than works in any others company through this survey people awareness about self employment benefit On other hand, the person which doing the job according to they standard they do works through it people on less responsibility subsequently, people have spend more time; family and friends. Furthermore, they are spending lot of time for enjoy upon any holiday as well as after closing time of job because have not any burden about job work. Regarding, for epitome, A survey is conducted by Indian government about doing the into national, local company is much more better because people have not any like of stress, worries, tension for works. Although, they aware to people for doing the work into multinational as well as institute. That all survey for motivate people about their professional work.
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; Money is not
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the answer
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it
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makes
a
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difference&quot
; In the
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current
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time
of technological advancement, one of the most pressing concerns is regarding the
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given
topic that which works
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is
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better
; self
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-
employment or works in
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other
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company
, institute? I shall explore the same from various aspects in the following paragraphs.

If we look both side of the argument, that which is depends upon
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person
thinking through their working process.

On one side, the
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person
have
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own
business
that is
more
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better
from
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other
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because
they took
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own
discussion according to requirement.
Moreover
,
that is
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person
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no
any of anyone. Although, they decided by
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own
wish
furthermore
, this type of
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person
is
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make
discussion maker
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person
.
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Afterthat
, they
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gives
the order to
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they employees
related working process. On moving,
for instance
,
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survey
is conducted
by NIC
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company
about
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self employed
is much
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better
rather
than works in any others
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company
through this
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survey
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people
awareness about self employment
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benefit


On
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other
hand, the
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person
which doing the job according to they standard they do works through it
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people
on less responsibility
subsequently
,
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people
have
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spend
more
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time
; family and friends.
Furthermore
, they are spending
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lot of
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time
for enjoy upon any holiday
as well
as after closing
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time
of job
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because
have not any burden about job
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work
. Regarding, for epitome, A
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survey
is conducted
by Indian
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government
about doing the into national, local
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company
is much more
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better
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because
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people
have not any like of
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stress
, worries, tension for works. Although, they aware to
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people
for doing the
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work
into multinational
as well
as institute. That all
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survey
for motivate
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people
about their professional
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work
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that self-esteem employment is better than working for a company or institution. What is your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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