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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion. v.9

Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. v. 9
Environmental protection is the responsibility of the government, others also suggest everyone is responsible. We can have a brief description on both the views and I could suggest my personal opinion as well. Firstly, we can discuss about the issues on the nature and as a human being, we polluted the earth heavily within a century. As revolution in the industrial development occurred a century ago, we started emitting the CO2 and industries such as automobile, steel plant, oil & gas industries are the major contributors of the pollution. On the other hand, vehicles such as bus, motorcycle and heavy trucks are also having their share in emitting the CO2. Secondly, each individual should be conscious and should have their own contribution to save the nature. Awareness among the people and the government started a couple of decades ago, they have taken various steps to reduce the emission, which affect the globe. For example, in the Europe, they have plans to change the mode of transport to use the railway as a major replacement, which could considerably reduce the pollution. Likewise, another part of the world has taken steps, to bring down the effect. Population in a less count suggest that, it is the country's leadership, who should implement and monitor the emission. They have a valuable reason, as far as the industry concern, contribution from the heavy industries are in majority. I think, it is acceptable and individual have nothing to do with the reduction activities. For example, in the China, manufacturing plants are enormously developed and common people have no data on the development, because it happens at the cost of environmental effects. Finally, in my opinion, the government's contribution is widely appreciated and to support them, everyone should act as a volunteer and be a part of the nature saver.
Environmental protection is the responsibility of the
government
, others
also
suggest everyone is responsible. We can have a brief description on both the views and I could suggest my personal opinion
as well
.

Firstly
, we can
discuss about the
issues on the nature and as a human being, we polluted the earth
heavily
within a century. As revolution in the industrial development occurred a century ago, we
started
emitting the CO2 and
industries
such as automobile, steel plant, oil & gas
industries
are the major contributors of the pollution.
On the other hand
, vehicles such as bus, motorcycle and heavy trucks are
also
having their share in emitting the CO2.
Secondly
, each individual should be conscious and should have their
own
contribution to save the nature.

Awareness among the
people
and the
government
started
a couple of decades ago, they have taken various steps to
reduce
the emission, which affect the globe.
For example
, in the Europe, they have
plans


to
change
the mode of transport to
use
the railway as a major replacement, which could
considerably
reduce
the pollution.
Likewise
, another part of the world has taken steps, to bring down the effect.

Population in a less count suggest that, it is the country's leadership, who should implement and monitor the emission. They have a valuable reason, as far as the
industry
concern, contribution from the heavy
industries
are in majority. I
think
, it is acceptable and individual have nothing to do with the reduction activities.
For example
, in the China, manufacturing plants are
enormously
developed and common
people
have no data on the development,
because
it happens at the cost of environmental effects.

Finally
, in my opinion, the
government
's contribution is
widely
appreciated and to support them, everyone should act as a volunteer and be a part of the nature saver.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. v. 9

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
303 words
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