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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. v. 5
A highly controversial issues today relates to some people think that only government should save our environment, while others believe that its all of our business. However, in this essay i'm going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my own opinion on the matter. On the one hand, nowdays our environment day by day going to the damaging. That’s why protect our environment is very essential for human being. It is our duty to save our orbit. every people should follow all of rules and regulation for protecting our planet. for example people should avoid plastic product, and use dustbin, as well as tree plantation is necessary for our environment. Also try to use environment friendly product, although we haven’t enough orbit friendly manufacturer. But we have to try this for making environment friendly product. On the other hand. our government should take good discission for helping our environment for becoming healthy and fresh planet. in addition our government should encourage their people for follow rules and protecting our orbit. for instance if our government arrange tree plantation campaign or arrange city cleaning campaign that time people attending this campaign and they help to save to environment. additionally if our government make cautionary tvc that time people will be careful. also our government should making new law for who cut trees and who doing bad job which one make bad influence in our environment. To sum up, in my opinion, a good environment and a cake of piece fresh air is our happiness. that's why its all of our responsibility and we have to try protect our planet.
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that
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government
should save our
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, while others believe that its all of our business.
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, in this essay
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going to examine this question from both points of view and then give my
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opinion on the matter.

On the one hand,
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nowdays
our
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environment
day by day going to the damaging. That’s why protect our
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environment
is
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essential for human being. It is our duty to save our orbit.
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every
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people
should follow all of
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rules
and regulation for protecting our planet.
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for
example
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people
should avoid plastic product, and
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use
dustbin,
as well
as tree plantation is necessary for our
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environment
.
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try to
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use
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friendly product, although we haven’t
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enough
orbit friendly manufacturer.
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we
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try this for making
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friendly product.

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discission
for helping our
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for becoming healthy and fresh planet.
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addition
our
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should encourage their
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for follow
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and protecting our orbit.
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instance if our
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government
arrange tree plantation campaign or arrange city cleaning campaign that time
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people
attending this
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campaign and
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help
to save to
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.
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cautionary
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will be careful.
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should
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new law for who
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trees and who doing
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job which one
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influence in our environment.

To sum up, in my opinion, a
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and a cake of piece fresh air is our happiness.
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's why its all of our
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responsibility and
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try protect
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IELTS essay Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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