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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.4

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 4
Nowadays, many adults have full-time jobs and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high. So feelings about one’s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole, and because of this, job satisfaction is indeed very important for he well being of that person. Employees get job satisfaction in a number of ways. Firstly, a person needs to feel that they are doing valued and valuable work, so positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect. A sense of fulfilment is also encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole. Secondly, when someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training opportunities, for example, then there is a sense of progression and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or community also contributes to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team. Of course not everyone enjoys their work. Hard economic realities mean that many people have little choice in the kind of job they can get. In some cases an employee is working in a job that suits neither their skills nor their personality. Some jobs are repetitive and boring, and labour relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity rather than to job satisfaction. However, even though it is unlikely that all works do feel happy in their work, I think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job. If the factors identified above are implemented, then any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job satisfaction.
Nowadays,
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many
adults have full-time
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jobs
and the proportion of their
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spent doing such
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jobs
is
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very
high.
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feelings about one’s
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must
reflect how an individual
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feels
about
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his or her
life as a whole, and
because of this
,
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job
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satisfaction
is
indeed
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very
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important
for
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well being
of that person.

Employees
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get
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job
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satisfaction
in a number of ways.
Firstly
, a person needs to
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feel
that they are doing valued and valuable
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work
,
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so
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positive
feedback from superiors is
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very
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important
in this respect. A
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sense
of
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fulfilment
is
also
encouraged if a worker
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feels
the
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job
is worth doing
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because
it contributes to the society or the economy as a whole.
Secondly
, when someone
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feels
they are improving or developing their
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skills
through training opportunities,
for example
, then there is a
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sense
of progression and purpose that rewards a worker. The
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sense
of belonging to a team or community
also
contributes to
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job
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satisfaction
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because
colleagues
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help
each other to enjoy their working
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lives
.
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is
also
increased by a
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sense
of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.

Of course
not everyone enjoys their
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work
.
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economic realities mean that
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many
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people
have
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little
choice in the kind of
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job
they can
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get
. In
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some
cases an employee is working in a
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job
that suits neither their
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skills
nor their personality.
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Some
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jobs
are repetitive and boring, and
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labour
relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity
rather
than to
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job
satisfaction.

However
,
even though
it is unlikely that all works do
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feel
happy in their
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work
, I
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think
it is not unrealistic to promote more
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job
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satisfaction
in any
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job
. If the factors identified above
are implemented
, then any
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job
can be
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improved
and more workers can
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feel
greater degrees of
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job
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satisfaction
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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