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Some people say that physical exercise should be done in gym or sport center Other people believe that exercise should done outdoors in open air. Which opinion do you agree with? v.1

Some people say that physical exercise should be done in gym or sport center Other people believe that exercise should done outdoors in open air. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 1
In recent years, extreme sports have become increasingly popular, and some people argue that governments should prohibit them. I completely disagree with the idea that these sports are too dangerous, and I therefore believe that they should not be banned. In my opinion, so-called extreme sports are not as dangerous as many people think. All sports involve some element of risk, and there should always be clear regulations and safety procedures to reduce the possibility of accidents. People who take part in extreme sports are usually required to undergo appropriate training so that the dangers are minimised. For example, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to sign up for lessons with a registered club, and beginners are not allowed to dive solo; they must be accompanied by an experienced professional. Finally, the protective equipment and technology used in sports from motor racing to mountain climbing is constantly improving safety. While I support regulations and safety measures, I believe that it would be wrong, and almost impossible, to ban extreme sports. In the first place, we should all be free to decide how we spend our leisure time; as long as we understand the risks, I do not believe that politicians should stop us from enjoying ourselves. However, an even stronger argument against such a ban would be the difficulty of enforcing it. Many of the most risky sports, like base jumping or big wave surfing, are practised far away from the reach of any authorities. I cannot imagine the police being called to stop people from parachuting off a mountain face or surfing on an isolated beach. In conclusion, I would argue that people should be free to enjoy extreme sports as long as they understand the risks and take the appropriate precautions.
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have become
increasingly
popular, and
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some
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people
argue that
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governments
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idea
that these
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sports
are too
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dangerous
, and I
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believe that they should not
be banned
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extreme
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sports
are not as
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dangerous
as
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many
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people
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think
. All
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sports
involve
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some
element of
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risk
, and there should always be
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clear
regulations and safety procedures to
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reduce
the possibility of accidents.
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who
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take part
in
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extreme
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sports
are
usually
required to undergo appropriate training
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so
that the
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dangers
are
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For example
, anyone who wants to try skydiving will need to
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sign
up for lessons with a registered club, and beginners are not
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allowed
to dive solo; they
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must
be accompanied
by an experienced professional.
Finally
, the protective equipment and technology
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used
in
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sports
from motor racing to mountain climbing is
constantly
improving safety.

While I support regulations and safety measures, I believe that it would be
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wrong
, and almost impossible, to ban
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extreme
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sports
. In the
first
place, we should all be free to decide how we spend our leisure time; as long as we understand the
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risks
, I do not believe that politicians should
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stop
us from enjoying ourselves.
However
, an even stronger argument against such a ban would be the difficulty of enforcing it.
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Many
of the most risky
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sports
, like base jumping or
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big
wave surfing, are
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practised
far away from the reach of any authorities.

I cannot imagine the police
being called
to
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stop
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people
from parachuting off a mountain face or surfing on an isolated beach.

In conclusion
, I would argue that
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people
should be free to enjoy
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extreme
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sports
as long as they understand the
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risks
and take the appropriate precautions.
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IELTS essay Some people say that physical exercise should be done in gym or sport center Other people believe that exercise should done outdoors in open air. Which opinion do you agree with? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
295 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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