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do you agree or disagree with the following statement. it is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time? you specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.371

it is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time? you specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 371
Violent movies are believed by many people to be the major cause of severe social issues, such as hostility, depression, alienation, and many other mental health problems. This problem can be solved by certain measures that must be taken by governments and individuals. The increasing amount of violence in films nowadays is causing undeniable consequences to individuals who watch them constantly causing them to suffer in many ways. Firstly, some people show hostile behaviour and start imitating the aggressive and violent acts they have seen in movies. For instance, they either turn into murderers or start bullying other people. Secondly, those who do not show their criminal intents tend to be affected in other ways. The amount of negativity shown in these movies can be transferred to the viewers leading them to depression, anxiety, and other mental health problems. Finally, in some severe cases, it might lead to extreme social anxiety as people feel a sense of impending doom, morbidity, and insecurity causing them to withdraw from society. Despite the aforementioned problems, there are steps that can be taken to eliminate them. Governments must enact laws to limit the amount of violence shown in movies. If the amount of violence in a movie exceeds the specified limit, the movie must be prohibited from being published anywhere. These laws should also be applicable to TV channels and online websites to stop broadcasting such films. Furthermore, families and school teachers should start warning adolescents about the dangers of watching such movies. Young people should be dissuaded from watching violent films. In conclusion, the exaggerated focus on hostility and aggression in a rising number of movies nowadays is detrimental to people’s health. It is a shared responsibility between governments and society members to curb this problem as soon as possible.
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many
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people
to be the major cause of severe social issues, such as hostility, depression, alienation, and
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many
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other
mental health
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problems
. This
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problem
can
be solved
by certain measures that
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must
be taken
by
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governments
and individuals.

The increasing
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amount
of violence in films nowadays is causing undeniable
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consequences to
individuals who
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watch
them
constantly
causing them to suffer in
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ways.
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,
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some
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people
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show
hostile
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behaviour
and
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imitating the aggressive and violent acts they have
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seen
in
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movies
.
For instance
, they either turn into murderers or
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start
bullying
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other
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people
.
Secondly
, those who do not
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show
their criminal intents tend to be
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affected
in
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other
ways. The
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amount
of negativity shown in these
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movies
can
be transferred
to the viewers leading them to depression, anxiety, and
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other
mental health
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problems
.
Finally
, in
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some
severe cases, it might lead to extreme social anxiety as
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people
feel a sense of impending doom, morbidity, and insecurity causing them to withdraw from society.

Despite the aforementioned
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problems
, there are steps that can
be taken
to eliminate them.
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Governments
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must
enact laws to limit the
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amount
of violence shown in
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movies
. If the
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amount
of violence in a
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movie
exceeds the specified limit, the
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movie
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must
be prohibited
from
being published
anywhere. These laws should
also
be applicable to TV channels and online websites to
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stop
broadcasting such films.
Furthermore
, families and school teachers should
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start
warning adolescents about the
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dangers
of watching such
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movies
. Young
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people
should
be dissuaded
from watching violent films.

In conclusion
, the exaggerated focus on hostility and aggression in a rising number of
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movies
nowadays is detrimental to
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people’s
health. It is a shared responsibility between
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governments
and society members to curb this
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problem
as
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soon
as possible.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay it is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time? you specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 371

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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