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It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v.1

It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v. 1
It is often believed by some institutions that their personnel dressing should be tidy while a few hold to a high esteem their staff performance in delivering set objectives. In my opinion, both views are valid. As smart dressing portrays a good picture of the company, quality of work done by the personnel speaks to the organisations capacity and capability in achieving their goals. Firstly, a staff is the mirror image of the organisation he/she works for. This image is reflected in the staff outward appearance to the outside world. An appearance that should be neat and formal, command respect for the personnel and by extension the organisation. In fact, some companies like the bank have dress codes for every cadre of staff. Secondly, a number of establishments, at the beginning of the year set objectives for their personnel and either semi-annually or annually appraise their achievement. This is used to measure the workers capability and competence in achieving the set goals which form part of the institution's goal. For instance, I work with an institution that is funded by Centre for Disease Control (CDC). The funders give us target for different indicators that speaks to the program my institution is implementing. I set my target with my direct supervisor based on my agreed job description and later evaluated based on my performance in achieving those set goals. When I meet my set targets, I in turn achieve the company’s goal which gives them a good image to the funders and the outside world. In conclusion, smart dressing and personnel performance both work in tandem to give the staff high value in the employment market and well position the company in the competitive market
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often
believed by
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some
institutions that their
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personnel
dressing should be tidy while a
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few hold
to a high esteem their
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staff
performance in delivering set objectives.

In my opinion, both views are valid. As smart dressing portrays a
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good
picture of the
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company
, quality of
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work
done by the
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personnel
speaks to the
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organisations
capacity and capability in achieving their goals.

Firstly
, a
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staff
is the mirror image of the
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organisation
he/she works for. This image
is reflected
in the
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staff
outward appearance to the outside world. An appearance that should be neat and formal, command respect for the
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personnel
and by extension the
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organisation
. In fact,
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some
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companies
like the bank have dress codes for every cadre of staff.

Secondly
, a number of establishments, at the beginning of the year set objectives for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personnel
and either semi-
annually
or
annually
appraise their achievement. This is
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used
to measure the workers capability and competence in achieving the set
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goals
which form part of the institution's
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goal
.
For instance
, I
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work
with an institution that
is funded
by
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Centre
for Disease Control (CDC). The funders give us target for
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different
indicators that speaks to the program my institution is implementing. I set my target with my direct supervisor based on my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
job description and later evaluated based on my performance in achieving those set
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goals
. When I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
my set targets, I in turn achieve the
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company’s
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goal
which gives them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
image to the funders and the outside world.

In conclusion
, smart dressing and
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personnel
performance both
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work
in tandem to give the
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staff
high value in the employment market and well position the
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company
in the competitive market
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It goes without saying in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, a human being has been engaged in various activities and tasks in order to provide the necessities of life. Recently, there has been a hot debate among many people about the v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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