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Write a letter to gym manager to recover your bag which you forget at gym yesterday. You came to know that gym will be closed for 1 week due to some renovation. 1) Introduce yourself2) Explain what things you have inside it. 3) Why you need it so urgent v.1

Write a letter to gym manager to recover your bag which you forget at gym yesterday. You came to know that gym will be closed for 1 week due to some renovation. 1) Introduce yourself2) Explain what things you have inside it. 3) Why you need it so urgent v. 1
Nowadays, travelling through cars is becoming increasingly popular. It can be beneficial in many ways. It can reduce the time and distance, but some people prefer the use of bicycles. They believe that the bicycle can reduce pollution and keep their body in exercise. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and draw a conclusion. First of all, by the change of technology, the means of transportation have been changed over the past years. One of the main changes is travelling through motors. The cars have become an important part of our lives. We can cover distance of miles in a few hours and minutes. For example, if we want to do grocery from a faraway supermarket in the city in Pakistan. We just reach there in a couple of minutes through car and put vegetables and other heavy stuff into the vehicle and reach back to home in no time. In this way, these cars have made our life simpler. There is a common belief that the use of bicycles positively affects our health and environment. People think that they can prevent pollution and overcrowding by the use of bicycles. In Europe, for instance, people are encouraged to take cycle rides in order to make less pollution. And people can do it as a sport to maintain their health. In conclusion, it is a common thought that travelling through cars is more convenient. I believe that bicycles are still in fashion. Personally, I think that bicycles are more effective way of transportation in a city as it's environmentally friendly.
Nowadays, travelling
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through
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cars
is becoming
increasingly
popular. It can be beneficial in
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many
ways. It can
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reduce
the time and distance,
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but
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some
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people
prefer the
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use
of
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bicycles
. They believe that the
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bicycle
can
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reduce
pollution and
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keep
their body in exercise. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and draw a conclusion.

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First of all
, by the
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change
of technology, the means of transportation have been
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changed
over the past years. One of the main
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changes
is travelling
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through
motors. The
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cars
have become an
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important
part of our
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lives
. We can cover distance of miles in a few hours and minutes.
For example
, if we want to do grocery from a faraway supermarket in the city in Pakistan. We
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just
reach there in a couple of minutes
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through
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car
and put vegetables and other heavy stuff into the vehicle and reach back to home in no time. In this way, these
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cars
have made our life simpler.

There is a common belief that the
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use
of
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bicycles
positively
affects our health and environment.
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People
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think
that they can
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prevent
pollution and overcrowding by the
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use
of
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bicycles
. In Europe,
for instance
,
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people
are encouraged
to take cycle rides in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
less pollution. And
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people
can do it as a sport to maintain their health.

In conclusion
, it is a common
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thought
that travelling
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through
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cars
is more convenient. I believe that
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bicycles
are
still
in fashion.
Personally
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
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bicycles
are more effective way of transportation in a city as it's
environmentally
friendly.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to gym manager to recover your bag which you forget at gym yesterday. You came to know that gym will be closed for 1 week due to some renovation. 1) Introduce yourself2) Explain what things you have inside it. 3) Why you need it so urgent v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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