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Some people say that online study is the most effective and convenient way to learn. Others believe that online study will never be as effective as learning at school, in person. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people say that online study is the most effective and convenient way to learn. Others believe that online study will never be as effective as learning at school, in person. v. 1
With the advent of the internet, the educational system is gradually shifting from classroom-based interaction to online study. Although it is generally considered that the former allows personal interaction between teachers and students. In contrast, some people believe the latter allows access to the best teachers in the world. I think a combination of the two approaches is required to gain a superior understanding. The classroom education allows students unbridled access to teachers and an opportunity to discuss ideas with fellow students. Various researches have proved that students learn more when they have personal access to a teacher since it allows them to ask doubts without hesitation. Also, when a number of students sit in a class, this creates an atmosphere of cooperation in which students discuss ideas and find solutions to problems. This is not possible in an online course. For instance, while online MBA courses are popular these days, most companies prefer full-time classroom MBAs as they have a superior group discussion, critical analysis, and communication skills. These skills are a product of fruitful discussions in a classroom. On the other hand, online education allows access to globally recognized teachers. Most of the local teachers who offer classroom coaching do not have adequate skills to teach children. Online teachers are better trained and have deeper knowledge than others. For instance, a Bangladeshi student can study free online courses in marketing, finance, computers, etc from famous lecturers in MIT and Harvard through Youtube, Coursera, and Edx. The native teachers in Bangladesh do not have the skills and knowledge to train children in these areas In conclusion, I believe that these approaches are complementary in nature. A student needs both the thoroughly learn a subject. While he can watch an online lesson on Youtube, he needs a teacher for interacting and discussing the doubts he faced during that lesson
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gradually
shifting from classroom-based interaction to
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online
study. Although it is
generally
considered that the former
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allows
personal interaction between
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teachers
and
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students
.
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some
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people
believe the latter
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access
to the best
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teachers
in the world. I
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think
a combination of the two approaches
is required
to gain a superior understanding.

The classroom education
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allows
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students
unbridled
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access
to
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teachers
and an opportunity to discuss
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ideas
with fellow
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students
. Various researches have proved that
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students
learn more when they have personal
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access
to a
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teacher
since it
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allows
them to ask doubts without hesitation.
Also
, when a number of
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students
sit in a
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class
, this creates an atmosphere of cooperation in which
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students
discuss
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ideas
and find solutions to problems. This is not possible in an
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online
course.
For instance
, while
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online
MBA courses are popular these days, most
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companies
prefer full-time classroom
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MBAs
as they have a superior group discussion, critical analysis, and communication
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skills
. These
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skills
are a product of fruitful discussions in a classroom.

On the other hand
,
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online
education
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allows
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access
to globally recognized
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teachers
. Most of the local
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teachers
who offer classroom coaching do not have adequate
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skills
to teach children.
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Online
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teachers
are better trained and have deeper knowledge than others.
For instance
, a Bangladeshi
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student
can study free
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online
courses in marketing, finance, computers, etc from
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famous
lecturers in MIT and Harvard through
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Youtube
, Coursera, and
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Edx
. The native
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teachers
in Bangladesh do not have the
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skills
and knowledge to train children in these areas

In conclusion
, I believe that these approaches are complementary in nature. A
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student
needs both the
thoroughly
learn a subject. While he can
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watch
an
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online
lesson on
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Youtube
, he needs a
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teacher
for interacting and discussing the doubts he faced during that
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lesson
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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Frank Smith

IELTS essay Some people say that online study is the most effective and convenient way to learn. Others believe that online study will never be as effective as learning at school, in person. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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    Present relevant ideas
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