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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. v. 1
Nowadays, there is growing trend to study from home, yet there are number of students that still attend universities and colleges for their education. I completely agree that distance learning can never have the same impact as enrolling in universities or colleges. First of all, attending schools is important for an individual personality development. The experience and relationship that one builds from their professors cannot be denied. It is no doubt true that teachers not just share knowledge in the classroom but other important moral values as well. For instance, our lecturer always shared her personal experiences in the classroom about life, that grew my confidence. Therefore, these individual moments cannot be achieved with long distance learning. Another important factor of enrolling in universities or college is the growth of social life. On the one hand, it helps students make friends, on the other hand, it can tempt them to be compatible. Moreover, it is no doubt true that everyone needs friend, and what is better than someone one can share their education with. In contrast, distance learning provides people with options to save money, and time. In other words, many students want to pursue jobs in order to pay expenses. With distance learning and custom schedule, they are able to work full time and make money. Nevertheless, this is not ideal, especially for students who leave no time for education. To conclude, I believe that attending universities or colleges has a positive effect on social and personal growth of students, but distance learning is a great option for individuals who are under the impact of financial crisis.
Nowadays, there is growing trend to study from home,
yet
there are number of
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students
that
still
attend
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universities
and colleges for their education. I completely
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agree
that
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distance
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learning
can never have the same impact as enrolling in
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universities
or colleges.

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First of all
, attending schools is
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important
for an individual personality development. The experience and relationship that one builds from their professors cannot
be denied
. It is no doubt true that teachers not
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just
share knowledge in the classroom
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but
other
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important
moral values
as well
.
For instance
, our lecturer always shared her personal experiences in the classroom about life, that grew my confidence.
Therefore
, these individual moments cannot
be achieved
with long
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distance
learning.

Another
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important
factor of enrolling in
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universities
or college is the growth of social life. On the one hand, it
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helps
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
friends,
on the other hand
, it can tempt them to be compatible.
Moreover
, it is no doubt true that everyone needs friend, and what is better than someone one can share their education with.

In contrast
,
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distance
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learning
provides
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people
with options to save money, and time.
In other words
,
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many
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students
want to pursue jobs in order to pay expenses. With
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distance
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learning
and custom schedule, they are able to work full time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
money.
Nevertheless
, this is not ideal,
especially
for
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students
who
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leave
no time for education.

To conclude
, I believe that attending
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universities
or colleges has a
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positive
effect on social and personal growth of
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students
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
distance
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
is a great option for individuals who are under the impact of financial crisis.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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