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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. others sat that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 32
It is argued that movies are much enjoyable when watched on mobile phones or tablets, however a section of people believe that films could be more interesting if these are seen in theaters. I vehemently espouse that movies should be enjoyed in cinemas and I will discuss both the aspects. People finds much comfortable and convenient to watch movies on gadgets such as smart phones and tablets as they can see the films anywhere and anytime. Most of the people nowadays are busy with their hectic lifestyle and they hardly spare their time to watch movies in cinemas so they prefer to watch it on their personal phones while traveling or before going to a bed. There is also a financial benefit of watching movies on phones because these are much cheaper as comparative to watching in theaters. People just have to pay for an internet package and can watch several movies by paying nominal charge merely. These could be the reasons why people enjoy more while watching movies on these gadgets. On contrary, basically, movies are known as best source of entertainment and these are screened in cinemas so that everyone could enjoy it immensely on bigger screen. These are much enjoyed in theaters because of its sound and visual quality as cinemas have high resolution screens and superior sound system that makes audience enthralled in the movie. Moreover, ambiance of the cinema halls are designed in such a manner that everyone could rejuvenate their minds while watching movies. Latest research shows that in the UK over 50% prefer to watch movie in theater and relax their minds. To completely enjoy, films should be seen in cinemas due to its better quality and vicinity of the cinema. Indubitably, people have to pay much for theaters comparatively watching on their own electronic gadgets but they could also enjoy profusely in cinemas. To sum up, films are produced just to entertain the spectators and they are telecast on large screens so that people can have benefit in relaxing their minds and spending leisure time and these are much enjoyable if they are seen on vast screens.
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is argued
that
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movies
are
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much
enjoyable when
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watched
on mobile
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phones
or tablets,
however
a section of
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people
believe that films could be more interesting if these are
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seen
in theaters. I
vehemently
espouse that
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movies
should
be enjoyed
in
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cinemas
and I will discuss both the aspects.

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People
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finds
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much
comfortable and convenient to
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watch
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movies
on gadgets such as smart
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phones
and tablets as they can
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see
the films anywhere and anytime. Most of the
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people
nowadays are busy with their hectic
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lifestyle and
they hardly spare their time to
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watch
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movies
in
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cinemas
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so
they prefer to
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watch
it on their personal
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phones
while traveling or
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before
going to a bed. There is
also
a financial benefit of watching
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movies
on
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phones
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because
these are
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much
cheaper
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as
comparative to watching in theaters.
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People
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just
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have to
pay for an internet package and can
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watch
several
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movies
by paying nominal charge
merely
. These could be the reasons why
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people
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enjoy
more while watching
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movies
on these gadgets.

On contrary,
basically
,
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movies
are known
as best source of entertainment and these
are screened
in
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cinemas
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so
that everyone could
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enjoy
it
immensely
on bigger
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screen
. These are
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much
enjoyed in theaters
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because
of its sound and visual quality as
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cinemas
have high resolution
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screens
and superior sound system that
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makes
audience enthralled in the
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movie
.
Moreover
, ambiance of the
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cinema
halls
are designed
in such a manner that everyone could rejuvenate their minds while watching
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movies
.
A determiner is probably missing here: "the Latest".
Latest
research
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shows
that in the UK over 50% prefer to
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watch
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movie
in
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theater
and relax their minds.

To completely
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enjoy
, films should be
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seen
in
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cinemas
due to its better quality and vicinity of the
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cinema
.
Indubitably
,
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people
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have to
pay
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much
for theaters
comparatively
watching on their
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own
electronic gadgets
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but
they could
also
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enjoy
profusely
in cinemas.

To sum up, films
are produced
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just
to entertain the
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spectators and
they are telecast on large
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screens
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so
that
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people
can have benefit in relaxing their minds and spending leisure time and these are
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much
enjoyable if they are
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seen
on vast
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screens
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.

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