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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be been seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and gives your opinion. v.29

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be been seen in a cinema. v. 29
Technology has brought in a luring twist in this fast-paced world. A section of society is convinced that movies can be enjoyed on our phones and tablets and there is no need to go to the theatre. Whereas, others tend to differ from this thought, as they believe that films are ought to be watched in a cinema for enjoying the same completely. In my opinion, I agree with the latter school of thought. The principal rationale for going to a cinema is to enjoy it fully while it is released and I agree. Firstly, the positive impact that audience attains after watching a movie on the big screen is immense, which make them satisfied. For instance, one of the studies conducted by the World Movie’s Council demonstrated that ninety percent of the viewers are happy when they experience a motion picture in cinemas. Secondly, the movie watchers get a real-time experience, which makes them satisfied to the core. As a result, watching movies on cinema enables people to be happy and satisfied. On the other hand, the usage of phone or tablets can replace cinema. One reason, these gadgets are user-friendly and can be accessed anytime and anywhere. For example, one of the surveys conducted by the US film industry illustrated that thirty percent of people opt to watch films on their home devices due to its easy access. Another reason for laying movies at home is cost effective, which allows everyone in the family to watch films anytime and also multiple times. Consequently, watching motion pictures on electronic devices not only restricts monetary encumbrance, but also easy to access. In conclusion, my strong conviction is that movies can only be fully enjoyed in cinema rather than at home, which make the audience happy and self-contained. Therefore, the public should be physically present in the theatre to enjoy the movie thoroughly.
Technology has brought in a luring twist in this
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fast
-paced world. A section of society
is convinced
that
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movies
can
be enjoyed
on our phones and tablets and there is no need to go to the
Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.
theatre
. Whereas, others tend to differ from this
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thought
, as they believe that films are ought to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watched
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
for enjoying the same completely. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the latter school of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
.

The principal rationale for going to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
is to enjoy it
fully
while it
is released
and I
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agree
.
Firstly
, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact that audience attains after watching a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
screen is immense, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them satisfied.
For instance
, one of the studies conducted by the World
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Movie’s
Council demonstrated that ninety percent of the viewers are happy when they experience a motion picture in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinemas
.
Secondly
, the
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movie
watchers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a real-time experience, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them satisfied to the core.
As a result
, watching
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movies
on
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cinema
enables
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to be happy and satisfied.

On the other hand
, the usage of phone or tablets can replace
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
. One reason, these gadgets are user-friendly and can
be accessed
anytime and anywhere.
For example
, one of the surveys conducted by the US film industry illustrated that thirty percent of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
opt to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
films on their home devices due to its easy access. Another reason for laying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
at home
is cost
effective, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
everyone in the family to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
films anytime and
also
multiple times.
Consequently
, watching motion pictures on electronic devices not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
restricts monetary encumbrance,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
easy to access.

In conclusion
, my strong conviction is that
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movies
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
fully
enjoyed in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cinema
rather
than at home, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the audience happy and self-contained.
Therefore
, the public should be
physically
present in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.
theatre
to enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
thoroughly
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be been seen in a cinema. v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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