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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v.25

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 25
It is undeniable that most of the people migrating to the cities in search of a better opportunity and lifestyle. Therefore, there is a drastic increase in the population of the cities and this create various worse situations. However, this essay will discuss two main problems that arise due to the rise in the number of people who starts living in the urban areas, including traffic congestion and lack of accomodation, but will also suggest some incredible solutions, including improving the infrastructure of roads and the construction of housing facilities. To begin with, it is seen that in the overpopulated cities, people is suffering from the traffic jams on the roads because there are a large proportion of people who commutes from one place to another and due to this, the number of vehicles on the roads are immense. In addition, an accomodation is also a major concern as it becomes hard for people to find a place to live in the cities as most of the posh areas are quite expensive and out of the reach for many middle class people who opt the urban life to settle down. For instance, one research article suggests that 70% problems that developed due to the large population in the cities are gridlocks on the roads and an improper living conditions. These few instances make it clear that the major cities of the world where traffic and searching a better area to live are the hurdles for the people, hinders them to lead a better lifestyle. There are some potential solutions in order to eradicate the above mentioned problems. Firstly, the maintenance of the roads or highways could improve the situation at a large extent. Thus, construction of more underground roads and the subway system will automatically reduce the transportation on the roads. Secondly, providing more affordable houses and the construction of flats, apartments near the city centre would provide the people an opportunity to search a best site to live in. Because the vast majority of people tend to choose a home from where they could easily access all the amenities. Indeed, Mumbai is a metropolitan city of India, where the population is exceeding day by day and for the convenience of the people, the government has constructed wider roads and town houses in the cities or even in the suburban areas where the city is easily connected. Overall, these steps of authorities will ultimately mitigate the effects of the most arising problems. In conclusion, the migration of people to the cities is increasing at an alarming rate which is the root cause of several worse problems that people are facing. This essay discussed two main conditions, the traffic and an accomodation problem. This essay suggested that solutions to the problems are twofold: the better infrastructure of roads and providing multiple housing options.
It is undeniable that most of the
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people
migrating to the
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cities
in search of a
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better
opportunity and lifestyle.
Therefore
, there is a drastic increase in the population of the
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cities
and this create various worse situations.
However
, this essay will discuss two main
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problems
that arise due to the rise in the number of
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people
who
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starts
living in the urban
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areas
, including
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traffic
congestion and lack of
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accomodation
,
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but
will
also
suggest
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some
incredible solutions, including improving the infrastructure of
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roads
and the construction of housing facilities.

To
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begin
with, it is
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seen
that in the overpopulated
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cities
,
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people
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is
suffering from the
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traffic
jams on the
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roads
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because
there are a large proportion of
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people
who commutes from one place to another and due to this, the number of vehicles on the
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roads
are immense.
In addition
, an
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accomodation
is
also
a major concern as it becomes
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hard
for
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people
to find a place to
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live
in the
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cities
as most of the posh
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areas
are quite expensive and out of the reach for
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many
middle
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class
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people
who opt the urban life to settle down.
For instance
, one research article suggests that 70%
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problems
that developed due to the large population in the
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cities
are gridlocks on the
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roads
and an improper living conditions. These few instances
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make
it
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clear
that the major
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cities
of the world where
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traffic
and searching a
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better
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area
to
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live
are the hurdles for the
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people
, hinders them to lead a
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better
lifestyle.

There are
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some
potential solutions in order to eradicate the above mentioned
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problems
.
Firstly
, the maintenance of the
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roads
or highways could
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improve
the situation at a large extent.
Thus
, construction of more underground
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roads
and the subway system will
automatically
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reduce
the transportation on the
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roads
.
Secondly
, providing more affordable
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houses
and the construction of flats, apartments near the city
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centre
would provide the
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people
an opportunity to search
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a
best site to
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live
in.
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Because
the vast majority of
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people
tend to choose a home from where they could
easily
access all the amenities.
Indeed
, Mumbai is a metropolitan city of India, where the population is exceeding day by day and for the convenience of the
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people
, the
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government
has constructed wider
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roads
and town
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houses
in the
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cities
or even in the suburban
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areas
where the city is
easily
connected.
Overall
, these steps of authorities will
ultimately
mitigate the effects of the most arising problems.

In conclusion
, the migration of
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people
to the
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cities
is increasing at an alarming rate which is the root cause of several worse
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problems
that
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people
are facing. This essay discussed two main conditions, the
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traffic
and an
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accomodation
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problem
. This essay suggested that solutions to the
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problems
are twofold: the
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better
infrastructure of
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roads
and providing multiple housing options.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problems. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
472 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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