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Some people say that now we can see films of our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that now we can see films of our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 1
We are in a world where technology is growing rapidly. Here some portion of individuals says that there is no need to watch movies in theatres, Instead of going to the film theatre we can see those in our own gadgets like phones, tablets and etc. But as far as my knowledge is concerned, we should watch movies in cinema malls only. The reasons I will be discussing it in the following paragraphs. There are two ways of watching movies in the cinema hall. One is going all the way to the theatre and watching the film with our family members or with the friends and the second way of watching is in the mobiles or any other sources like the internet. When we watch some movies like horror and action in our mobiles there won’t be any sound experience and effects which we experience in theatre. However, if the people watch movies in the theatres they will come across the lively experience of sounding system and also visuals on the big screen. It is very exciting to have such real experiences in the closed environment. My opinion is that we should watch movies in the theatre only because it’s an entertainment world where some individuals will get food by making movies if we see that in our devices they will have no source to earn. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that there is a biased situation. For well being of some skilled professionals, we should encourage people to go to the theatres to watch movies.
We are in a world where technology is growing
rapidly
. Here
some
portion of individuals says that there is no need to
watch
movies
in
theatres
,
Instead
of going to the film
theatre
we can
see
those in our
own
gadgets like phones, tablets
and etc
.
But
as far as my knowledge
is concerned
, we should
watch
movies
in cinema malls
only
. The reasons I will be discussing it in the following paragraphs.

There are two ways of watching
movies
in the cinema hall. One is going all the way to the
theatre
and watching the film with our family members or with the friends and the second way of watching is in the mobiles or any other sources like the internet. When we
watch
some
movies
like horror and action in our mobiles there won’t be any sound
experience
and effects which we
experience
in
theatre
.

However
, if the
people
watch
movies
in the
theatres
they will
come
across the lively
experience
of sounding system and
also
visuals on the
big
screen. It is
very
exciting to have such real
experiences
in the closed environment. My opinion is that we should
watch
movies
in the
theatre
only
because
it’s an entertainment world where
some
individuals will
get
food by making
movies
if we
see
that in our devices they will have no source to earn.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that there is a biased situation. For
well being
of
some
skilled professionals, we should encourage
people
to go to the
theatres
to
watch
movies
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films of our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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