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Some people say that no one should do the same job forever while others believe that doing the same job is beneficial for the individual company and society Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people say that no one should do the same job forever while others believe that doing the same job is beneficial for the individual company and society 1
It is undeniable fact that the prices of fuels have flourished in the past few decades. It is often disputed by many people that fuel price hike is the only way to reduce the consumption of fuels while others do not agree with this. Nevertheless, I believe that in today's globalised world, there are numbers of alternatives available that can be helpful for reducing fuel consumption. There are numbers of measures that can be taken to overcome the excessive use of fuels. First and foremost is that, the government can create awareness about more and more use of public transportation rather than using individual vehicle. Apparently, it would help to reduce traffic complications as well as pollution. Second, higher authorities can introduce eco-friendly vehicles like electric cars and motorbikes which diminish the overall use of fuels. For instance, Tesla cars are introduced by many countries to curb the extravagant use of fuel which run by electricity. Moreover, if people comprehend the value of fossil fuels, it would be fruitful and can also hinder utilisation of fuel. Hence, these are the alternatives that can be taken at personal level alongside government bodies. On the other hand, hiking in price fuel may enhance complications in people's lives. To initiate with, if further increase in the cost of fuels would be arduous for commuters to commute in daily life. What is more, they may face difficulties in many ways. Additionally, no doubt it will help to decrease usage of natural resources, but rather becomes complicated for many people. To sum up, increasing in the money of fuel does not bring good results. Although, can be mitigated by using suitable transportation ways that I also assert.
It is undeniable fact that the prices of
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fuels
have flourished in the past few decades. It is
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often
disputed by
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many
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people
that
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fuel
price hike is the
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only
way to
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reduce
the consumption of
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fuels
while others do not
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agree
with this.

Nevertheless
, I believe that in
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today
's
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globalised
world, there are numbers of alternatives available that can be helpful for reducing
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fuel
consumption.

There are numbers of measures that can
be taken
to overcome the excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
First
and foremost is that, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can create awareness about more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transportation
rather
than using individual vehicle.
Apparently
, it would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
traffic complications
as well
as pollution. Second, higher authorities can introduce eco-friendly vehicles like electric cars and motorbikes which diminish the
overall
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
.
For instance
, Tesla cars
are introduced
by
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many
countries to curb the extravagant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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fuel
which run by electricity.
Moreover
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
comprehend the value of fossil
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fuels
, it would be fruitful and can
also
hinder
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utilisation
of
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fuel
.
Hence
, these are the alternatives that can
be taken
at personal level alongside
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government
bodies.

On the other hand
, hiking in price
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
may enhance complications in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. To initiate with, if
further
increase in the cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
would be arduous for commuters to commute in daily life.
What is more
, they may face difficulties in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
ways.
Additionally
, no doubt it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to decrease usage of natural resources,
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but
rather
becomes complicated for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

To sum up, increasing in the money of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
does not bring
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
results.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, can
be mitigated
by using suitable transportation ways that I
also
assert.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that no one should do the same job forever while others believe that doing the same job is beneficial for the individual company and society 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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