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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. v.1

Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. v. 1
Over the past few years, opinions are divided as to whether a country can be both prosperous and able to protect the climate. In my perspective, we can achieve both targets. It is my belief that one of the methods to develop the economy while protecting the surroundings is to use alternative energy types. By using these sources of energy, we can reduce not only the need of fuel, coal but also the contamination from industrial productivity. For example, Japan whose people make full use of solar energy and even earn a huge amount of money by selling the surplus amount to other countries. This money constitutes 20 percent of the nation’s GDP. Therefore, using alternative energy is the profound contribution to both thriving the economy and keeping the environment clean. On the other hand, economic growth may have inevitably detrimental impacts on the surrounding by leading to the excess consumption of natural resources. Since a flourish financial associates with industrialization, which causes a rise in the demand of energy. For instance, the dreadful air pollution in Vietnam is caused by the lack of forests, due to the fact that the urbanization process requires more land space, trees are rapidly being cut down. Thereby, devastating the environment is an unavoidable outcome while developing a prosperous economy. In conclusion, even though it is argued that environmental damage is unavoidable due to the acceleration in economic development, I believe that it is quite possible if humans take actions to increase the use of alternative energy and encourage recycling.
Over the past few years, opinions
are divided
as to whether
a country can be both prosperous and able to protect the climate. In my perspective, we can achieve both targets.

It is my belief that one of the methods to develop the economy while protecting the surroundings is to
use
alternative
energy
types. By using these sources of
energy
, we can
reduce
not
only
the need of fuel, coal
but
also
the contamination from industrial productivity.
For example
, Japan whose
people
make
full
use
of solar
energy
and even earn a huge amount of money by selling the surplus amount to other countries. This money constitutes 20 percent of the nation’s GDP.
Therefore
, using alternative
energy
is the profound contribution to both thriving the economy and keeping the environment clean.

On the other hand
, economic growth may have
inevitably
detrimental impacts on the surrounding by leading to the excess consumption of natural resources. Since a flourish financial associates with industrialization, which causes a rise in the demand of
energy
.
For instance
, the dreadful air pollution in Vietnam
is caused
by the lack of forests, due to the fact that the urbanization process requires more land space, trees are
rapidly
being
cut
down. Thereby, devastating the environment is an unavoidable outcome while developing a prosperous economy.

In conclusion
,
even though
it
is argued
that environmental damage is unavoidable due to the acceleration in economic development, I believe that it is quite possible if humans take actions to increase the
use
of alternative
energy
and encourage recycling.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
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