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Some people say that it is not possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.2

Some people say that it is not possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. v. 2
Environmental sustainability is a very popular topic, especially in our days. While some people highlight the impossibility for a country to be economically favourable and have a clean environment at the same time, on the contrary in my opinion, a country can enjoy both benefits. On the one hand, according to some people, environmental damage is an inevitable condition for economic prosperity. An example of this may be economic dependence on fossil fuels or deforestation, through the release of greenhouse gases, have caused global climate change. A demonstration of this is given by the increase in profits for some companies, which represent an environmental and social threat. For instance, companies responsible for the disposable plastic pollution. They increase their economic gain by destroying the planet's wealth. On the other hand, I believe that if most industries adopted a zero waste lifestyle, there would surely be environmental advantages that would not affect the economic system. For example, an alternative that would limit environmental pollution and at the same time allow gain in economic terms, could be to avoid huge fuel consumption and drain electricity. Nowadays, in fact, the presence of electric cars has spread more and more. Furthermore, there are countries like Sweden, the Netherlands, which, thanks to eco-sustainable projects and policies, have implemented a series of environmental-friendly initiatives that have contributed to a significant increase in tourism. In conclusion, I think that having respect for the environment around us means having respect for our health and that of all living beings around us, so we should always adopt an eco-friendly lifestyle.
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Environmental
sustainability is a
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very
popular topic,
especially
in our days.

While
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some
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people
highlight the impossibility for a country to be
economically
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favourable
and have a clean environment at the same time,
on the contrary
in my opinion, a country can enjoy both benefits.

On the one hand, according to
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some
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people
,
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environmental
damage is an inevitable condition for
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economic
prosperity. An example of this may be
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economic
dependence on fossil fuels or deforestation, through the release of greenhouse gases, have caused global climate
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change
. A demonstration of this is
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given
by the increase in profits for
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some
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companies
, which represent an
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environmental
and social threat.
For instance
,
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companies
responsible for the disposable plastic pollution. They increase their
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economic
gain by destroying the planet's wealth.

On the other hand
, I believe that if most industries adopted a zero waste lifestyle, there would
surely
be
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environmental
advantages that would not affect the
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economic
system.
For example
, an alternative that would limit
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environmental
pollution and at the same time
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allow
gain in
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economic
terms, could be to avoid huge fuel consumption and drain electricity. Nowadays, in fact, the presence of electric cars has spread more and more.
Furthermore
, there are countries like Sweden, the Netherlands, which, thanks to
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eco-sustainable
projects and policies, have implemented a series of environmental-friendly initiatives that have contributed to a significant increase in tourism.

In conclusion
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that having respect for the environment around us means having respect for our health and that of all living beings around us,
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so
we should always adopt an eco-friendly lifestyle.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is not possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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