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Some people say that it is impossible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people say that it is impossible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. v. 1
Today I am going to talk about the school uniform rules in the upcoming paragraphs First of all, we will talk about the schools who are asking their students to wear some decided standardized. This is a very good idea which has been developed by the schools to uniquely identify their students. With the help of some standards the schools can segregate the students who are attached to the institution. For example, if the institute has fixed a dress for the students and the students are going for an excursion, then it will be very easy for academy authority to identify the students. If they are wearing casual clothes then it will be very difficult for universities to find their students. Secondly by fixing consistent dress the school culture will be smooth. No one will wear short dresses. Secondly if we talk about the schools who have not fixed their uniform for the students then the culture of the academy will not be so good. The students wear the clothes by their own choice. Sometimes the clothes will not be suitable according to institutional culture. For example, in the schools the students are always advised to wear formal clothes and light coloured clothes but it is not mandatory. Some students will wear a short type of dresses and brightly coloured garments which will lead to some bad effect on the institute. One more thing is that the students will always demand for new garments to their parents. Finally, it is concluded that the fixation of uniform for the school students is a very good idea. All the schools should follow.
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uniform
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rules
in the upcoming paragraphs

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, we will talk about the
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schools
who are asking their
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students
to
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wear
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some
decided standardized. This is a
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very
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good
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idea
which has
been developed
by the
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schools
to
uniquely
identify their
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students
. With the
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help
of
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some
standards the
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schools
can segregate the
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students
who
are attached
to the institution.
For example
, if the institute has
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fixed
a dress for the
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students
and the
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students
are going for an excursion, then it will be
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very
easy for academy authority to identify the
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students
. If they are wearing casual
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clothes
then it will be
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very
difficult for universities to find their
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students
.
Secondly
by fixing consistent dress the
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school
culture will be smooth. No one will
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wear
short dresses.

Secondly
if we talk about the
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schools
who have not
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fixed
their uniform for the
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students
then the culture of the academy will not be
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so
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good
. The
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students
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wear
the
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clothes
by their
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own
choice.
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Sometimes
the
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clothes
will not be suitable according to institutional culture.
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, in the
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schools
the
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students
are always advised to
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wear
formal
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clothes
and light
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coloured
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clothes
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but
it is not mandatory.
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Some
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students
will
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wear
a short type of dresses and
brightly
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coloured
garments which will lead to
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some
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bad
effect on the institute. One more thing is that the
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students
will always demand for new garments to their parents.

Finally
, it
is concluded
that the fixation of uniform for the
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school
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students
is a
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very
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good
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idea
. All the
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schools
should follow.
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is impossible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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