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Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. v. 2
There is an opinion that living in countryside is better than living in a city. I am agree with this. Here my arguments. Firstly, living in countryside is far from pollution. As we know that more trees in village. It is good for their health. Secondly, villagers usually kinder than people in city, they still hold herritage culture to teach attitute for children. This is different from urban life in city, that their live is oriented in money. People in city do much more damage for environment and their body. For example, mostly youngsters in city prefer eat junk food for a quickness reason. Some of company owners build factories, which pollutes the air. In other side, education and technology in city is moving faster than in countryside. Teachers in city usually have higher graduation than in village. Also, student in city get better access in technology than in countryside. This part is important to shape smart generations. Somehow, smart is not the most important aspect. Attitude will frame a person to be more humanity, sincere and has higher emphaty. Those manners are more urgent than increasing IQ. This part needs to teach in early year of a child. Today we find much smart people but lack of manner and it makes this world worse than before. Based on the reasons above, I stand in my perspective that living in countryside is better for children' s growth. They need to learn kindness and norm first than mathematic or computer.
There is an opinion that
living
in
countryside
is better than
living
in a city. I am
agree
with this. Here my arguments.

Firstly
,
living
in
countryside
is far from pollution.
As
we know that more trees in village. It is
good
for their health.
Secondly
, villagers
usually
kinder than
people
in city, they
still
hold
herritage
culture to teach
attitute
for children.

This is
different
from urban life in city, that their
live
is oriented
in money.
People
in city do much more damage for environment and their body.
For example
,
mostly
youngsters in city prefer eat junk food for a quickness reason.
Some
of
company
owners build factories, which pollutes the air.

In other side, education and technology in city is moving faster than in
countryside
. Teachers in city
usually
have higher graduation than in village.
Also
, student in city
get
better access in technology than in
countryside
. This part is
important
to shape smart generations.

Somehow, smart is not the most
important
aspect. Attitude will frame a person to be more humanity, sincere and has higher
emphaty
. Those manners are more urgent than increasing IQ. This part needs to teach in early year of a child.
Today
we find much smart
people
but
lack of manner and it
makes
this world worse than
before
.

Based on the reasons above, I stand in my perspective that
living
in
countryside
is better for
children&
#039; s growth. They need to learn kindness and norm
first
than mathematic or computer.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
249 words
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