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Some people say that it is important to keep to our home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this v.2

Some people say that it is important to keep to our home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this v. 2
It is argued that keeping a house or workplace neat and clean is essential and things should be in an organized way and at the correct places. This essay agrees with the statement because it can save time that people waste looking for things and it can influence mood and bring positivity around them. The main reason why people should have a clean house or workplace is that they can save precious time by keeping things at the correct place. In other words, when things are cluttered it takes a lot of time searching for them. Therefore, time can be utilized efficiently and it can increase productivity at work. For example, a study done by the Guardian in the year 2017 revealed that every person can save an average of 30 min per week if they do not have to look for the things they need daily. Another reason is that neatness can influence the mood of a person and they can think with a positive attitude. That is to say that some people feel negativity if the house is untidy and a tidy and comfortable house gives them a feeling of appeasement and relaxation. This means that it can affect the behaviour and mood of people and they will have a positive attitude. For instance, according to a survey done by the New York Times people who like neat and clean workplaces or houses are more likely to have a positive attitude towards life. In conclusion, some men and women believe that the home and workplace should be tidy and organized. I believe that it can save time for people and also can affect the mood and give them positive vibes.
It
is argued
that keeping a
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house
or
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workplace
neat and clean is essential and things should be
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in an organized way
and at the correct places. This essay
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agrees
with the statement
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because
it can
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save
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time
that
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people
waste looking for things and it can influence
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mood
and bring positivity around them.

The main reason why
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people
should have a clean
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house
or
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workplace
is that they can
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save
precious
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time
by keeping things at the correct place.
In other words
, when things
are cluttered
it takes
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a lot of
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time
searching for them.
Therefore
,
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time
can
be utilized
efficiently
and it can increase productivity at work.
For example
, a study done by the Guardian in the year 2017 revealed that every person can
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save
an average of 30 min per week if they do not
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have to
look for the things they need daily.

Another reason is that neatness can influence the
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mood
of a
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person and
they can
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think
with a
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positive
attitude.
That is
to say that
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some
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people
feel negativity if the
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house
is untidy and a tidy and comfortable
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house
gives them a feeling of appeasement and relaxation. This means that it can affect the
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behaviour
and
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mood
of
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people and
they will have a
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positive
attitude.
For instance
, according to a survey done by the New York
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Times
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people
who like neat and clean
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workplaces
or
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houses
are more likely to have a
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positive
attitude towards life.

In conclusion
,
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some
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men
and women believe that the home and
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workplace
should be tidy and organized. I believe that it can
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save
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time
for
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people
and
also
can affect the
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mood
and give them
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positive
vibes.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is important to keep to our home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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