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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not on learning practical skills Do you agree or disagree? v.6

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not on learning practical skills v. 6
The reviews justified by people on whether different levels of information right from school to universities has focused mainly on learning the facts and not learning practical skills as in the curriculum mainly focuses on the same textbooks each and every year, the flow for the education given to the people remains the same for years, only once in 10 years the correction is being made to the system or new subjects are being added. As we can see with changing time and technology the level of training has changed and that's why my opinions differ from what people think, as the engaging and enhancement of technology time by the time everything as become digital and virtual now a days, which keeps people interested and in touch with the content of the studies. For example the augmented and virtual reality has taken place in information and even the smart tv boards are in existence which give students a different form of learning practically. The teachers show a video of a mathematical sum online on the screen with an artistic touch and sound which engages small children in studying and helps them to learn better. We can also deal with the practical approach of studying the volcanic eruption live using augmented reality which is a glass like structure which shows the live practical demonstration of the volcanic eruption and you can also move the mountain virtually and study the layers happening at the point eruption. So for me no longer the study of the students from school to universities has remained the same with books, talking about facts the studies have evolved with the increasing technological evolution of ideas into the academic fields.
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on learning the facts and not learning practical
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skills
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given
to the
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people
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remains
the same for years,
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once in 10 years the correction is
being made
to the system or new subjects are being
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added
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with changing time and technology the level of training has
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changed
and that's why my opinions differ from what
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people
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think
, as the engaging and enhancement of technology time by the time everything as become digital and virtual
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now a days
, which
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keeps
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people
interested and in touch with the content of the
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studies
.
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the augmented and virtual reality has taken place in information and even the smart
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tv
boards are in existence which give students a
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form of learning
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. The teachers
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show
a video of a mathematical sum online on the screen with an artistic touch and sound which engages
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small
children in studying and
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helps
them to learn better. We can
also
deal with the practical approach of studying the volcanic eruption
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live
using augmented reality which is a glass like structure which
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shows
the
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live
practical demonstration of the volcanic eruption and you can
also
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move
the mountain
virtually
and
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study
the layers happening at the point eruption.

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So
for me no longer the
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study
of the students from school to universities has remained the same with books, talking about facts the
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studies
have evolved with the increasing technological evolution of
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ideas
into the academic fields.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not on learning practical skills v. 6

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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