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Some people say that in the modern age it is unnecessary to teach children about the skill of handwriting. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that in the modern age it is unnecessary to teach children about the skill of handwriting. v. 1
There is no denying that computers and technology are leading the world, hence, they should be used in any education process. Nevertheless, they could be used in the wrong way and cause a serious damage. In my opinion, technology should definitely be implemented in class learning with a control and balance. On the one hand, using technology can provide different advantages to any educational process, among them: saving time to students and teachers as the information is easily accessible, providing students with different tools such as games and interactions to make the process more enjoyable and fun, avoiding any information loss as everything can be saved in the cloud and also can help to save the environment as there is not paper use. On the other hand, education is not only about providing technical knowledge, it is also important to teach values and manners and this can only be taught by human teachers. Research has found that, students who have received an education by computers only are unable to tackle daily issues, as they did not have the opportunity to interact with other people and learn about real situations, they have also lack of life lessons which are the most important to learn. In conclusion, Technology can be very helpful when talking about technical knowledge, however, traditional education given by educators should be used as well. In my opinion, the best way to educate and shape professionals is integrating both methods, creating a balance between strong knowledge and students able to tackle with any daily situation.
There is no denying that computers and
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technology
are leading the world,
hence
, they should be
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used
in any
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education
process.
Nevertheless
, they could be
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used
in the
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wrong
way and cause
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a serious damage
. In my opinion,
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technology
should definitely
be implemented
in
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class
learning with a control and balance.

On the one hand, using
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technology
can provide
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different
advantages to any educational process, among them: saving time to
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students
and teachers as the information is
easily
accessible, providing
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students
with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
tools such as games and interactions to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the process more enjoyable and fun, avoiding any information loss as everything can
be saved
in the cloud and
also
can
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help
to save the environment as there is not paper
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use
.

On the other hand
,
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education
is not
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only
about providing technical knowledge, it is
also
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important
to teach values and manners and this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be taught
by human teachers. Research has found that,
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students
who have received an
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education
by computers
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only
are unable to tackle daily issues, as they did not have the opportunity to interact with other
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people
and learn about real situations, they have
also
lack of life lessons which are the most
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important
to learn.

In conclusion
,
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Technology
can be
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very
helpful when talking about technical knowledge,
however
, traditional
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education
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
by educators should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as well
. In my opinion, the best way to educate and shape professionals is integrating both methods, creating a balance between strong knowledge and
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students
able to tackle with any daily situation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that in the modern age it is unnecessary to teach children about the skill of handwriting. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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